|Reviews for Mysterious Thing, Time|
| grovepjp chapter 13 . 9/12
| grovepjp chapter 12 . 9/12
| grovepjp chapter 11 . 9/12
| grovepjp chapter 10 . 9/12
| grovepjp chapter 9 . 9/12
| grovepjp chapter 8 . 9/12
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| grovepjp chapter 1 . 9/12
| SM87 chapter 27 . 9/11
Too many side plots and unnecessary scenes.
Harry's too much into the whole baby thing instead of being a war hardened veteran.
Dumbledore isnt using his future knowledge for political advantage or to lay down better laws.
Theyve both become mostly Reactive like in canon.
The Unspeakables are boring and any personal scenes with them were better skipped.
By knocking off all the cool death eaters early on, it felt like you had to shoe horn in cannon fodder vampires who werent even that interesting.
In fact, most of the canon characters were sidelined in favor of boring OCs.
Too many wasted opportunities in this story.
| SM87 chapter 1 . 9/11
Ok see.. the first chapter is a decent hook. You got me interested with the concept..its fairly novel too. Usually its Harry going back in time.. but this has potential.
Which is why its so sad to see that youve abandoned it. Irl events take precedence I know. And I hope you are all right.
But since im already hooked.. and in the rare event that you or someone else will takeup and finish this story, Im gonna read the whole thing and see how this interesting plot progresses.