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Jolliapplegirl chapter 5 . 8/11/2011
update! update! update! update! update! update! update! update!update! update! update! update! update! update!
Jolliapplegirl chapter 4 . 8/11/2011
funny chapter.
Jolliapplegirl chapter 3 . 8/11/2011
this one was better. i actually felt something reading this. Poor ren(pout)
Jolliapplegirl chapter 1 . 8/11/2011
This was very eduactional for me. i was wonderirng about kyokos mom. I had nothing on her. All i know is that she has black hair, tends to be a bitch and abadoned kyoko. i didnt even know her name til now. My one complait is the fact that Ren and Kyoko are together. Not to say i dont suport them, im just surprised and, for some reason, annoyed by the whole thing. cant say why.
21han chapter 5 . 11/27/2010
plz continue! o
Samantha Rice chapter 5 . 7/27/2009
i like it. i think u should mayb clarify if sho is like a dinner geust or a house geust and mayb put in a little of kyoko at work and home and some of ren at work. other than that it is ur brainchild so do wit it wat u will.
Ecki chapter 6 . 7/23/2009
Please familiar yourself with the use of f7, also known as spellcheck, the use of a dictionary and familiarize yourself with the service of a beta.

Improper grammar is consider reportable TOS abuse.

Also, add author's note only posting as a major no no site violation. You have been reported for your second violation in the same fiction.
Ecki chapter 5 . 7/23/2009
Please familiar yourself with the use of f7, also known as spellcheck, the use of a dictionary and familiarize yourself with the service of a beta.

Improper grammar is consider reportable TOS abuse.
Ecki chapter 4 . 7/23/2009
Please familiar yourself with the use of f7, also known as spellcheck, the use of a dictionary and familiarize yourself with the service of a beta.

Improper grammar is consider reportable TOS abuse.

Now add author's note only posting as no no to that. You have been reported to the site admin for breaking the rules.
Ecki chapter 3 . 7/23/2009
Please familiar yourself with the use of f7, also known as spellcheck, the use of a dictionary and familiarize yourself with the service of a beta.

Improper grammar is consider reportable TOS abuse.
Ecki chapter 2 . 7/23/2009
Please familiar yourself with the use of f7, also known as spellcheck, the use of a dictionary and familiarize yourself with the service of a beta.

Improper grammar is consider reportable TOS abuse.
Ecki chapter 1 . 7/23/2009
Please familiar yourself with the use of f7, also known as spellcheck, the use of a dictionary and familiarize yourself with the service of a beta.

Improper grammar is consider reportable TOS abuse.
Nehneh chapter 6 . 7/22/2009
Please do not abuse the site by going against the TOS of this forum. Author's note only posting is considered reportable offense. Let me addendum some of the rules, in case, you didn't read it.

Here is a list of conducts that should always be observed:

Spell check all story and poetry. There is no excuse for not performing this duty. If you do not have a word processor that has the spell checking feature, use a search engine such as to find one.

Proofread all entries for grammar and other aspects of writing before submission. 'Hot off the press' content is often riddled with errors. No one is perfect but it is the duty of the writer to perform to the best of his/her ability.

Respect the reviewers. Not all reviews will strictly praise the work. If someone rightfully criticizes a portion of the writing, take it as a compliment that the reviewer has opted to spend his/her valuable time to help improve your writing.

Everyone here is an aspiring writer. Respect your fellow members and lend a helping a hand when they need it. Like many things, the path to becoming a better writer is often a two way street.

Use proper textual formatting. For example: using only capital letters in the story title, summary, or content is not only incorrect but also a disregard for the language itself.

Entries not allowed:

Non-stories: lists, bloopers, polls, previews, challenges, author notes, and etc.

One or two liners.

MST: comments inserted in between the flow of a copied story.

Stories with non-historical and non-fictional characters: actors, musicians, and etc.

Any form of interactive entry: choose your adventure, second person/you based, Q&As, and etc.

Chat/script format and keyboard dialogue based entries.
Nehneh chapter 5 . 7/22/2009
Random lack of capitalizations. Lack of grammar and punctuation means you need to get some help with that. Please use a beta-reader. It's free and it means you never have to say "Sorry, my story sucks." So, please for the sake of reader's eyes. Use a beta. Lack of grammar is a reportable offense. Also, you have been reported to abuse for the previous chapter being author's note only and it's against rule to solicite audience participation. Please read the guideline more closely and do not abuse the site by going against the TOS.
Nehneh chapter 4 . 7/22/2009
By the way, you have now been reported to abuse for the offense of author's note only posting. Please do not do this again.
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