Reviews for When Worlds Collide
Guest chapter 3 . 9/24/2011
I just started reading this and other than the poor grammar and really short chapters, the story line is starting to get interesting. One other thing in this chapter all of a sudden Bella knows about her car and Edward's truck, when you first mentioned her car she had no clue what it was other than it being red (she should either know nothing about cars or just know the basics, but it would be better if it was consistent). I would recommend working on the grammar and your consistency to make the story flow better.
Guest chapter 20 . 9/23/2011
So at the end of the chapter its a little confusing in that Edward seems to be doing two confilcting things:

"After that, I went to watch Edward and Jasper. Edward locked himself in his room with all his war stuff, and Edward and I relaxed in his room."

I'm guessing the first one should have been Jaspter - Just thought you might want to go back and fix this. Loving the story so far though.
csp4 chapter 32 . 9/11/2011
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csp4 chapter 22 . 9/11/2011
I'm having a hard time with this as believable! They already agreed to change them so there is no reason to leave. This makes no sense at all! I totally agree with 1 reviewer that this is your story & you can do whatever you want to. But, with what was decided in preceding chapters, it makes no sense:(
csp4 chapter 21 . 9/11/2011
Alice better not be emo-stupid enough to 'New Moon' Jasper:(
csp4 chapter 20 . 9/11/2011
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