|Reviews for Blue Moon|
| toolazytolongin chapter 23 . 11/18/2014
I was going to keep going and finish it but I just can't. This is an interesting concept but you have to check your spelling and grammar; it's too distracting! Sometimes you forget words, other times you add them, write the wrong word or completely misspell them. There are probably about 2-3 words per chapter that need to be fixed. (This is also a skill that every entry level job requires, so it would be good to learn to proof your papers and such.) The juvenile writing style, grammatical errors, and spelling errors makes me wonder how old you are and if you should be writing lemon-type material.
Jacob and Renesmee imprinted and you can't just imprint on someone who has imprinted. That makes no sense! But, I do understand that you have liberties as an author, I just don't think it makes any sense cannon wise. There are lots of new characters and their backgrounds are confusing. There are too many perspective changes. It makes it hard to keep track of whats going on. Finally, there's just a TINY bit too much of fluff in some of the scenes. I find that I can skip paragraphs and still understand what's going on. I feel like some of the characters original qualities got jumbled up a bit.
However, you really do have a unique story line here. I like the references to Edward and Bella because I feel that too many post breaking dawn FF completely forget about them. The soundproofing the interior walls was genius!
| MyladyNancy chapter 13 . 10/18/2014
I really liked this chapter and the challenges of left behind when a love one dies. I wish Angela was in on the Bella secret. what a nice way to finish this moment.
| MyladyNancy chapter 10 . 10/18/2014
(chapter 10) I know this is already finished so every thing will be a surprise to me. but I would think someone should be going to Volturi doing recon and finding out what is really happening? I have really enjoyed your story.
| Ashley Laredo chapter 9 . 4/3/2013
Of COURSE Emmett's favorite number is 69.
| mackenzie chapter 9 . 11/18/2012
I am in love with this book and of coarse emmets number is 69...;)
| Anne Shirley Cullen chapter 12 . 11/12/2012
I love this chapter. Just to let you know you confused descending and ascending. Dedown/minus/negative and Ahadd/plus/up. Other wise it's a great story. Sorry to nit/pick, but I just get annoyed with little this like that. I has taken me years to compensated my dyslexia, and to see misused word like that just up set me.
Especially, since I had to teach myself little tricks to be able to read and write on level. Also, just a reminder don't rely on spell check it doesn't have it in the program to understand the meaning of the sentence. And, Grammar check sucks! For example while I was typing AND, I forgot the d and Spell check left it as AN. I had to go back and put the D in.
| Guest chapter 10 . 9/9/2012
Love the story but it would have been better I'd Jake and nessie were together like the origional books implied would happen
| thotsayoa chapter 14 . 12/4/2011
too many new characters. also the speed of their intro is too erratic. plus it makes bella and ed's powers seem diminished...stoppin time?...well, mayb this book is more abt renessme...
| thotsayoa chapter 5 . 12/4/2011
me thinks the introduction too quick...not drawn out well enuff. except of course there'll be an upsettin turn of event in the next few chapters...
| blueberrypie94 chapter 6 . 12/3/2011
Great story but what happened with Jake and Nessie, I thought he imprinted on her
| zeisha chapter 12 . 5/31/2011
i absolutly luv dis story n ur writing style...n frankly i think ur amazing...because when i had read twlight i had some idea but i wass always bad at putting my idea down into words...n nw seeing dis story wid so many amazing idea ...is juss 2 amazing...i luv it
thank u so much ...
i no im writing a comment a lil late considering d fact tht u hav already written n completed dis novel...but i juss wanted 2 shown u hav glad i m tht u hav written dis...n thank u :) :D
ohhh n could u also send me d link 2 the bridesmaid dress n leahs dress pls
| A.ALIgator chapter 10 . 1/19/2011
CANT YOU GIVE JACOB A BREAK.
| bellan3 chapter 38 . 11/3/2010
l love this story can't wiat till i read the next story.
| charlo chapter 31 . 7/22/2010
when what is anns mum and dads name ? and wat is her last name ?
| angelspike55 chapter 1 . 7/4/2010
love your story