Reviews for the new kid
aisuru-hondoo chapter 1 . 3/7/2013
OMG! I love this! its so sweet! You certanly done the best!
Guest chapter 1 . 11/3/2012
Everything was fine, until that mary-sue appeared. Seriously, must people insert fucking themselves in the stories? STICK TO CANON CHARACTERS!
yaoipigglet chapter 1 . 7/21/2011

i haven't read this in a while!
XxHoneyBabyChildxX chapter 1 . 8/17/2009
I LOVE IT! ITS THE BEST!AW XD i love it so much!
Spirits.Dawn chapter 1 . 3/14/2009
Good, . You need to work on your english though...
Prisoner-Of-Love chapter 1 . 3/1/2009
Aw! Nice one! :D

I love this story
lovingthefight chapter 1 . 2/17/2009
i think you accidentaly called tobi "tuba" once

but other than that it was a really sweet story

i loved it XD
Silverlynxcat chapter 1 . 2/14/2009
It was good, entertaining, but I think the flow was a bit bumpy, it moved quite fast and lacked a bit of description to make it flow better. I think the dialogue overran it a bit.

A bigger issue I noticed was your grammar, it does need more practice but if you keep going, maybe getting someone to read over it and help you, that should be fixed in no time.

Otherwise I really enjoyed it 3
TheTwoAuthors chapter 1 . 1/19/2009
omg, i love this,lol

poor kakuzu, getting hurt, hehe, but i like it, heheh,lol

pls keep going