|Reviews for The Hardest Thing|
| Fran L chapter 2 . 5/20/2012
I love this story :) A bit of Scott-bashing, a bit of brotherly loveliness, some Jeff redemption and a hearty sprinkling of funny on top - great stuff!
Your brothers are especially interesting (I mean, the way you write the Tracys, not your actual brothers, though if they exist I'm sure they're interesting too! Where was I...?) I love how they interact, in that lovely close, protective and teasing way they have. I laughed out-loud at the idea of Alan putting milk in the car. Your Alan is adorable :) And I'm interested in the way you write John too, as a child who was distantant physically and emotionally, but still loves completely. It makes sense that he would be prone to a panic. Lucky good ol' steady Virgil was there too, and I totally love his genius in using Jeff's absence to get the car for Scott.
The second chapter from Jeff's point-of-view worked really well. I admired how he noticed Virgil's fear of him, and Scott's parroting of his unhealthy catchphrase. "Again, Jeff wondered what had he had become, because he knew that he deserved that look." heartbreak!
But you don't leave us dangling in misery for too long; the peanut butter and ketchup sandwich made me laugh too :P And the father/son interactions are gorgeous.
All in all, uplifting and tear-jerking, without being too sickly-sweet. I loves it :)
| Writer With Sprite chapter 2 . 6/20/2011
| Jimmy Candlestick chapter 2 . 4/4/2010
Mhm...I liked it. A lot. I've been looking for something like this story. The nanny business was amusing. I felt like you could've stretched a few things out...can't pin them down though. But, I liked it.
| SophieFaraday chapter 2 . 1/29/2009
I love the bit where John remembers the phone number by sound-reminds me of old-school hackers and 'phone phreaks'. Icing on the cake: Virgil saying, 'Cool!' the ability of tonal recognition being a connection between these two brothers.
Naughty, naughty Gordon! Who knew he was such a terror as a little lad? Alan denying he ever said he liked the nanny was a nice, very realistic touch. At that age, he'd do most anything to ensure his big bro's favour.
Excellent description of the progress of a migraine-I'm guessing you have experience, there.
Second to last line, first chapter: Is 'He also didn't comment with the youngest started giving him directions' supposed to be 'He also didn't comment when the youngest started giving him directions'?
I didn't find myself confused about the John-in-Scott's-classroom scene, just assumed John was so concerned that he decided to check in on him. Virgil turning up moments later, same assumption. Scott looked really ill, they hadn't seen him like that before, things had been building up, they were frightened, etc.
Your representation of Jeff strikes me as very realistic. He's a self-made man's man, the love of his life died unexpectedly, and here he has five young sons to bring up as well as multiple business ventures to maintain. It makes sense he'd avoid family duties and lose himself in work, keeping his mind occupied and emotions numbed, fooling himself that he's doing the right, responsible thing.
A great read, thanks! Keep 'em coming.
| spinningleaves chapter 2 . 1/22/2009
Aww very cute. I like the way you showed specifically Scott's stress by showing all the little things he had to do like sandwiches and school notes. I also like how you showed how disconnected Jeff was without making him a total monster. Good work!
| mcj chapter 2 . 1/21/2009
Eriphi this is absolutely was a privilege to read such a warm and special piece of writing. I had to read it three times over to truly appreciate its excellence. My favourite image was Jeff the furious father coming to grips with the reality of his situation by use of the those words "we don't need anyone's help". This and the final sentence.
Bravo and thank you again.
| jendarra chapter 2 . 1/21/2009
I loved this story. I love anything to do with Scott. (Except people killing him or his brothers.)
You can just see him taking his fathers words to heart and trying to sort out everything himself.
And for a change his younger brothers step in and look after him.
| Cutiepie2191 chapter 2 . 1/20/2009
That was a great story! I loved it! Keep up the good work:)
| cathrl chapter 1 . 1/20/2009
I enjoyed this a lot. The way Jeff's expression came back to haunt him was particularly good, and I could absolutely see Scott taking it far too far to try to do the right thing, and John and Virgil going along with it. And I absolutely cracked up at John doing worst case headache diagnosis and Virgil stamping on it quick.
It is a bit confused at times - it's a bit convenient that John arrives in Scott's classroom and then the only person they meet is Virgil, and I was wondering how they managed to get out of the school without having to sign out or anything.
And I wasn't sure Jeff had ever terrified the kids - I more got the impression he'd convinced them that independence was so important that they couldn't ask for help either even when they needed it.
But what a lovely story (unless you're poor old Scott - I'm wincing in sympathy) - and it ended at exactly the right place. We can imagine the rest :)
| truegold-dragonstar chapter 2 . 1/20/2009
Neat little story. I love the way Scott tries to take the blame off Virgil when he sees Jeff's mad, and then Virgil tries to take it back because he knows Scott's sick. And John with his nose in a book non-stop. And Gordon's campaign against the nanny!
A couple of times I got a little confused as to who's where, though - Scott first feels really bad on the bus, right? Then he gets to school and staggers into his classroom, fine. Then John turns up? What's he doing there? After that John takes him out - to go to the nurse - and it's in a corridor somewhere that Virgil puts in an appearance. Well, a) why isn't he in his own class, and b) if he's been looking for Scott, why didn't he head for Scott's class straight away? Then - much later on - Jeff arrives home and yells for Virgil, who appears. Scott comes out after him to defend him, that little scene happens, and then Scott, Virgil, AND JOHN go back into Scott's room. Where did John come from, and what was he doing?
In the main, though, I really enjoyed this, so thanks a lot.
| Little Miss Bump chapter 2 . 1/20/2009
Very nice indeed. The plotline was simple, yet wonderfully explored, and I admire the skill with which you set out the perfect pace. Not too fast, not too slow. Just right. And your characterisation was great, too. I could really see the stubborn TB1 pilot in young Scott, and the miniature genius hidden within John. And Alan was just plain adorable, so that was great. Gordon, as usual, was up to his cheeky tricks. Hah, he gave that nanny what for, didn't he? But she didn't exactly seem like a nice person, so perhaps she deserved it.
It's perfectly plausable that Scott would try and play down his pain, his stubbornness completely overriding his common sense. And it's also perfectly understandable for Jeff not to have realised how much responsibility he was laying down on his son, what with running a billion dollor company and all.
But sometimes it's the smallest of things that have the biggest impact, as you showed us with that one phrase that Jeff himself had used. Upon hearing it spoken in a different context, and by his own boys, made him realise that, in reality, things weren't as fine and dandy as he had first thought. That was very well executed, my friend. A round of applause to you!
Well, now that Daddy Tracy is officially back in business, I can rest easy. And the last line assured me that grandma will soon be on the case to help keep things in order. *sigh* Now that's more like it.
Great story, eriphi! Thanks for posting it for us, and I hope to read more of your creations soon!
| tiylaya chapter 2 . 1/20/2009
I really enjoyed this story. All the boys were in character and it was just like Scott to struggle onwards, taking his father's words to heart even when he was ill. I also had to admire Virgil's practicality when it came to finding a solution. It was actually very sad to see how much the boys were hurting and to watch Jeff realising that. The family could easily have fallen apart if he had been too stubborn to come around - or if something more serious had happened before he came to that realisation.
All in all, well written and thoughtful. Many thanks for posting it.
| SusanMartha chapter 2 . 1/19/2009
Good job! It was nice to see a story where it didn't take a life threatening illness to make Jeff see what was happening. And I can just see Scott forging Jeff's name on the school letters. I loved Jeff's reaction when Scott repeated his own words back at him. Well written and to the point.
| err. who am i chapter 2 . 1/19/2009
Argh, it's awesome! The jumbled intense emotions in this story left me clueless about what to think. I admire Scott's pride, but I also scold it. But I hope you explore more on Jeff's awakening. You know, once at a time and built on little things instead of in a click. But still it's a piece of excellent writing and neatly written. I can really emphatize to Scott.
| KatZen chapter 2 . 1/19/2009
Aww, poor Scotty; having a migraine.
Glad Jeff got his act together at the end though.
I really loved this story; it was cute and had enough brotherly fluff to keep me happy. :)