Ok so what up with Ba’al here im a little confused here

Man this is a great story it's a shame it was never finished I hope the creator all right and alive it looks like he stopped updating around the time covid hit and if he is may he be blessed with inspiration for his story and if he's in prison I hope this sentence is up soon but then again if he's married and he's still in prison forever

The more I look at this the more I question you intelligence

Why kind of leader is a door mat I really think your retard

The plot is disgusting seriously anilate earth already are that much of what with making the MC stupid

You are trash you can't even write a decent evil mc

His retard was index is increasing

Why is he acting like retard and adding capitalism and not dare attack SG does not want to learn I find his stupidly frustrating

Hmm, as noted by current day 3 dimensional space battle simulation games, where you can customize the entire internal playout of your ships, that the best ship design inspired from science fiction is from the UNSC faction of the Halo series.

This is because their ship design philosophy minimizes the surface area by which your ship can be damaged when facing your enemy, while maintaining as large an area as possible for as many armaments as is feasible for your power core. It also reduces the problem of secondary chain reaction explosions, when an enemy destroys a gun port on the ship. Nothing more annoying than when a gun port gets destroyed to then cause the connected power line and adjacent sub systems to then explode within the superstructure of a ship.

No consistency at all and we’re barely 3 chapters in. Not a good sign

honestly i liked the concept. it was good. the plot as well. my only thing was too many crossovers. i think you shouldve kept it to 3 or 4 tops. Going more is ambitious and takes away from the main plot. it was a good story in my opinion.

Thats it? A big ass warning for a sentence at the end of the chapter that's barely relevant? The entire damn chapter was combat. Disappointing.

its actually quite interesting.
i really cannot understand this. Words there is nothing more dangerous than a man that has got nothing to lose describe me absolutely perfectly. Nothing God Emperor did wouldnt be anything i wouldnt have done and worse had i been in his shoes. But here we diverge. There would be no drunking, no mourning. I would start playing with the Void, while the rage and loss is still fresh. After all its in his name, its very probably the only thing capable of actually hurting him and the moment he killed her that would be the moment my goal would change, i would stop at absolutely nothing to end him. I would gladly erase the whole existence just to kill this son of a bitch.

Grammar quality has been hit or miss for the last dozen chapters. Here it took a nosedive.
It’s also incredibly dumb for him to keep using other goa’uld armor for his forces. He’s got every tech tree and Asgard/replicator fabrication. The base armor should be better than almost anything anyone else can produce and the armor for his more elite troops (using rarer materials) should blow any salvage out of the water.

Also the timeline of uplifting worlds is just bad. Infrastructure and physical improvements is fine enough but getting the people used to the new normal and staffing his institutions at this speed is insane. You’ve got hundreds of planets that don’t have enough experienced people trying to operate in organizations that don’t have any institutional knowledge for training, operating, or coordinating. Unless everyone is having their hand held by AIs just the paperwork, phone call, email, and accounting stuff would be crushing.

Then there’s the evil harem junk you seem set on pursuing. You own hundreds of worlds and you need to clone and brainwash women? You know their personalities and can’t come up with any offer to give you a shot at seducing them? Give a future empress a replacement body or something.

This chapter is (I’m hoping) the peak of the cringe in this story. The entire interaction is terrible.
- I’m evil, but not.
- You can trust me, but not
- I’ve no reason to lie to you, but I do
- Here’s some fun comments on your body
- I’ve got stalkerish knowledge about you
- Forced kiss

It’s a lot of edgy harem fanfic pitfalls.