|Reviews for Scar childs|
| Guest chapter 1 . 5/10/2013
| Roy Olsen chapter 2 . 4/4/2009
Very good! This is a very intense story with a touch of humor, and that is always the way to write, in my opinion. I like the detail of the character's actions, but I would like to know more detail about their surroundings. Where are they at? What does it look like? And the first english grammar I would work on is the dialogue. Your words are great, though. I was very surprised at how much this story grabbed my attention. Again, very good!
| Asterisk78 chapter 1 . 1/24/2009
Awesome! You have once again left a fantastic cliff hanger, and you've done some very tasteful paragraphing. Kudos! Just one suggestion: make sure that your dialogue has the correct punctuation. You know, commas as usual, and question marks and exclamation points when appropriate.
Keep up the good work!