|Reviews for Satin's Kiss|
| MISTER MacUpdatesTooRarely chapter 1 . 6/12/2009
Very dark. I like the style; how it focuses on the ideas and thoughts behind events rather than the events themselves. You don't cheapen these background feelings either; fleshing them out gives a more well-developed and interesting character than someone who just goes around and does things without pause.
You have a couple of unnecessarily long sentences that could be split in two and be better as such.
Avoid switching points-of-view because it can get confusing. It's not a big problem in a short piece like this, but the more you add the more you have to avoid changes like that.
Overall, its only flaws are very minor and easily fixed. It's a nicely done bit of fiction in my opinion.
However, it feels completely unrelated to Max Payne. Just saying.
| peggles727 chapter 1 . 3/2/2009
Interesting concept but it's not spelled satin, satin is a fabric. Satan is the word you want.