Reviews for Our Secret Lullaby
phlossie chapter 15 . 3/16/2013
WOW, ok i did not expect that ending. XP i like your story, however i was kinda disappointed that you stuck to the twilight plot line, i mean this is dean we're talking about, he's nothing like Bella, and the story would have been totally different with him. - not that i didn't like your fic, i just think it had a lot of potential that you didn't necessarily embrace.
i really really like your idea, the two worlds blend quite nicely. it was kind of strange imagining dean with Edward, of all people, but it mostly worked.
i just think you could have taken the story a lot further. XP - phlossie
Rokkis chapter 15 . 6/24/2010
God that was a crappy ending. After all those chick-flick moments Dean suddenly forgot.

While the story is rather well written, everything just seemed to be made a bit too convenient for the plot-line. Especially the Hunter, who just happened upon Dean and Edward and seemingly managed to watch them for weeks without any of the 7! vampires noticing, one of them a Seer even. Coupled with the fact that Alice also conveniently couldn't See this particular human when Dean was captured, sort of left a bad after taste. It makes the ending here seem remarkably fake and pretty much like the plot of some pathetic day-time soap opera show. I am guessing there is either a sequel written, in the making or planned, and I can only hope that the story is better thought out.

Also the fact that Dean had absolutely NO contact seemingly with Jasper I find surprising. Consider Jasper's own past, one would think that he and Dean would get on like a house on fire. Did Dean even find out that Jasper could read emotions? Eh.. perhaps not important to the all over plot, nevertheless ignoring or forgetting other characters in the family isn't that good...

Cheers though! And congrats on a finished fic.
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 15 . 8/26/2009
omg i wish u wouldnt have ended it there thats just sad
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 14 . 8/26/2009
oh crap not good the storys good but dean being in trouble isnt lol
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 13 . 8/26/2009
oh boy rose shouldnt have beat dean up wonder if edward will figure out dean was beat up by rose and if he does what will he do lol
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 12 . 8/26/2009
aww thats awesome deans finally realizing he has to move on from his past
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 11 . 8/26/2009
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 10 . 8/25/2009
aww time is getting close til dean changes and can john and sammy accept deans decision
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 9 . 8/25/2009
oh boy he wanted to become a vampire but at the hands of edward not someone else
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 8 . 8/24/2009
i love it
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 7 . 8/24/2009
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 6 . 8/24/2009
ya john took the news of dean dating a guy but wonder if he will take it that dean is dating a vampire
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 5 . 8/24/2009
very interesting glad edward didnt leave or dean leave as well
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 4 . 8/24/2009
oh boy
bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 3 . 8/9/2009
dejavu lol
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