Reviews for The Only Ones Left |
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![]() ![]() ![]() This was a great chapter. Please write more soon! |
![]() ![]() Wow...that was one good fanfic! Is Iris going to be the story any more (like in flashbacks or whatever)? Please write more more more! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you, Ghost, for your constructive criticism. Keep in mind, though, that I'm just writing this for fun, not actually trying to make a big story out of it. I think you're right, though...I might change the order of things a little later to make it easier and more sensible to follow. For now, the part about his family will come a little later. Thanks for your suggestions! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Telepaths are cool! This kid would get along great with Will, yes? They could sit and discuss the soultearing agony of guilt and stuff ;) |
![]() ![]() ![]() This character is cooler then I thought. He's a P6 or P7 class telepath AND a mathematical genius in Mathilda class. And he fails tests on purpose! Hehehe! I like his style. The double-flashbacking thing is a bit difficult to follow, but that not much a problem. I think you should have put the axe-eradication of his family after his memories from school, for instance. You should write a synopsis before you start the story so that you know what to write beforehand. BTW, Mr Stevens wasn’t inspired by a certain malignant but really cool Harry Potter character, was he? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Oooh! Eeeevil Bad Guys! Just like we like 'em! There's just one thing I'd like to point out; if your character is to curse, try to avoid mixing stuff like "You f#ck#ng p##ce of sh#t!" with stuff like "Damn your soul, your blood shall be mine!" It's not that I have anything against anachronism, just not in cursing and other kinds of speech. It sounds a little off. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well, I'll be! You might actually be really good at this! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank You! I'm so glad you updated! I've been needing something to read. None of the other fanfics I read were updated today so I'm glad atleast one was. I'm eternaly greatful! Keep up the GOOD work! . |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow! This is really cool! Aylee is right, this IS spiffy! _~ |
![]() ![]() ![]() Aya! That was such a cool chapter! That must be his gift! I wounder who the choosen one will be then? Please continue I really want to know what's going to happen. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love your writing. This is a great story. Thank you for reviewing mine, and today I posted the first His Dark Materials story I wrote. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Thank you thank you thank you for writing more! Now write chapter five. Thanks for reviewing my story too. Your story is probably better than all of mine mixed together! |
![]() ![]() salmakia and tialys 4ever! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Good Lord Dark Nation that was morbid! I like it! - Please continue you are a very good writer/author. Come on more violence... I mean plot please! ;;;; |
![]() ![]() Oooh shiney! I mean, that was good! Cant wait to read the next chapter(s)! |