Reviews for The Red Line |
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![]() ![]() American healthcare is a joke. Its sad and scary how people go into debt simply from needing care to survive. The lengths poor Edeard had to go to for his daughter is horrific. I learned last week that it costs you $2000 simply for using an ambulance. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Please tell me we get to hear how Edward got the nick name Thumper! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I am so bad about commenting, but I can't put this story down. How you can weave such serious moments and then crack me up. *chef kiss* |
![]() ![]() poor charlie he probbly things he sent them to there deaths |
![]() ![]() i,m gonna say it again victoria is a bitch a fucking hore and i want to murder her as well just give me a gun BURY HER ASS |
![]() ![]() i fucking hate that bitch she should burn in all 7 rings of hell |
![]() ![]() feeling bad for edward |
![]() ![]() It's WHOA, not WOAH. Look it up if you don't believe me. |
![]() ![]() The man lost a leg he is scared trying to pretend to be tough does not either one of them especially Bella the one going to school to be a therapist think that Charlie is taking loosing a leg a little to well. You are making Charlie out to emotionless about his leg really I don't think anyone is this ok about loosing a leg I mean Really. |
![]() ![]() Wow I am glad Bella such a bitch that she is ok with Charlie loosing a leg but it not like Bella ever cared for Charlie anyway. Poor Charlie needs a daughter who actually loves him and not a selfish bitch |
![]() ![]() ![]() Woww...such an amazing story...although I admit I had to cut out the nasty chapters when Edward came back after the two weeks...sorry this was just too much of the sadistic content ...Hannibal Lecter meets the Sadist Homosexual Rapist...erm no thank you..but apart from that I will revisit the other chapters to really take it ALL in...first time reading might have been a bit breathless;-))) |
![]() ![]() ![]() L...COME BACK AND FINISH THIS STORY. PLEASE UPDATE |
![]() ![]() ![]() I don't know if you still check your reviews on this given how long ago it was posted, but I HAD to review this - pretty sure this is the first story I've reviewed! I'm now on my second read through of The Red Line and the sequel; I had to go back and reread immediately after my first read to appreciate the subtleties of the story given the later revelations! Not going to lie, in both parts I felt sick to my stomach and would take a break to brain bleach with some fluffy fics instead, but the fact that your writing caused both revulsion, but also times where I couldn't contain my giggles, is truly the sign of a very talented storyteller. I honestly think that you could get this published with some adjustments and editing, but I believe you mentioned in an A/N that you don't particularly want to publish. Either way, I sincerely hope you will share more of your incredible imagination and gift for weaving an intriguing tale - it was a rough journey, but WHAT an eye opening one! I'm sure that for some people the more disturbing sections, mostly in the sequel for me personally, would be too hard to get through. However, as I'm sure you are well aware, these situations DO happen, and worse, when it comes to human trafficking. It's truly appalling, but sadly it's a reality for some people, I'm sure that you have alerted your readers to the fact that this can and does happen in the world and can happen to anyone. I have never been so affected by a fic that I find myself thinking about it days after finishing, but this one is just staggering in the impact it provides for the brave readers able to get through it. YOU ARE AMAZING! P.S - the trailer on YouTube that Biel made is also incredible, I'm not surprised in the least that you inspired it with your writing. You've certainly inspired me to attempt writing fanfic again; I am definitely not capable of writing something as visceral and gritty, with a side order of love, friendship, loyalty and wicked humour and vindication as you have! Honestly, this was awesome in the true sense of the word. |
![]() ![]() "First, Edward was a prostitute" is the greatest execution of a canon reference in an AU or fanfic of all time, E |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow! Really enjoyed reading this story - for shock value alone! Will have to put this on my favs list to come back and read again in a few years! :) |