|Reviews for Reversal of Fortunes|
| rewind gone nuts chapter 4 . 6/29/2009
Not bad, not bad at all. I'm personally of the opinion that Nodoka would uphold that contract, if only because she is, in her way, as obsessed with duty as her husband and son are, but every person has their own opinion. That Ukyo and Shampoo took steps to make sure she really was serious about her claims of only intending to frighten Genma was a nice touch that helped it flow more fluidly, so good work with that.
| Hat O' Doom chapter 3 . 6/29/2009
Nice story-wwriting! Interesting plan the girls have there. Almost foolproof. What could possibly go wrong?
| loaned chapter 3 . 6/23/2009
Cool, keep up the good work. It's really turning out to be cool.
| Dumbledork chapter 3 . 6/22/2009
I really enjoy this story so far.
| For Spite chapter 3 . 6/22/2009
It's interesting how much you have this one incident spiral out. Of course, Ranma (and a lot of episodic series) has quite a few points where things could change but don't. Still, you do a good job characterizing Ukyo and Shampoo's uneasy alliance. In fact, I'm surprised Ukyo's not on the character list for this since she probably gets more screen time than Ranma does. Does it only limit you to two? Oh well, no complaints, just something I noticed. Noticing the mother's theme this chapter I wonder if anything happened to Shampoo's since I don't believe we ever see her.
And it'd be nice if we got a theory behind Ranma's oddly low key reactions to Akane under the jewel (low key and reversed relative to everyone else and what one would think they'd be).
As for your chapter sizes, I prefer big chapters to small chapters and small chapters to no updates. So, I'll take what I can get.
| Nysk chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
Awesome turn of events.
Well played out by the two schemers and I have high hopes of seeing how it plays out.
I think the two should consider the idea that, after seeing how attention starved Nodoka is, to meet her as themselves and try to worm their way into their mother-n-laws heart without letting Ranma and company know.
I truly look forward to more of this.
| Vilkath chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
Still not that great of an impression of Ranma yet in this fic, seems take all worst qualities and exagerate them. I can only hope he's not the easy to knock out, stupid idiot in future chapters.
As for chapter length, it's not bad and it is genearly a rather personal thing for authors. Major issue I usualy feel is shorter chapters, specialy ones 2k words or less often run into the problem of 'rushing things', pushing events past vague and fast as possible to get things done in such short chapters.
Longer chapters have their issues to as authors take forever to update and some times give up.
| rewind gone nuts chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
Well, this is pretty well written, and if this format means this will update more often, I'm all for it.
I was a little surprised that Shampoo didn't offer Ukyo some Instant Nanniichuan (it's generally accepted that she still has some left over from that farce of a date attempt) to heighten the disguise... or were you planning on a scene in the next chapter where Ukyo, struggling to keep up the masquerade after having been allowed to be frank about her gender for so long, silently wishes that she had accepted the offer instead of allowing her gut reaction of being freaked out by the prospect to take over? I'm pretty sure someone of your skill could make a pretty funny sequence out of it.
Anyway, a nice chapter, intriguing development and good characterization. I wonder if either (or both) of the girls might come up with the idea of piqueing Ranma's interest in what, precisely, the Tendo/Saotome arrangement consists of- he canonly has never been told anything more than "We decided we'd hitch our kids before you were born, so you are going to marry Akane- deal with it. And ignore those other girls after you too; Akane is the only one with any right to claim you as hers."
| an evil fox chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
I'm enjoying this story very much so far. The only critique I have is an editorial one: you continuously used the word "chief" in the place of "chef". Other than that I didn't notice any glaring errors, but I wasn't looking too hard.
Great work, I'm looking forward to reading more.
| NightmareSyndrom chapter 3 . 6/20/2009
You call this short? I'm lucky if I can get a chapter half this length
| loaned chapter 2 . 6/17/2009
Cool, keep up the good work.
| boilingseas chapter 2 . 6/17/2009
It's good to see you writing again. Your work is always of a very high quality.
Your characters are very true to canon, especially as Shampoo saw the jewel as an obstacle to her happiness. To her, the rules are very simple, she's following them, but not many others do. Ranma is a similar person, with his own code to adhere to. That's why I think Ukyo and Akane are both poor choices for Ranma, they are very much modern girls, with many interests and subtle rules. For Ranma and Shampoo, the rules are simple and quite clear. They are the only ones who can truly understand each other.
| Tellemicus Sundance chapter 2 . 6/17/2009
BWAHAHAHAHAHA! That is SO like Akane to jump headfirst into something while not understanding the necessary basics of the situation and then making a fatal mistake that causes the opposite of what she wanted to happen.
And though I can fully understand why the fathers would want to use the jewel, Akane slightly caught me by surprise. I understand that she does like Ranma on some deranged level, but at the same time I can't believe that she'd actually try to use a form of mind-control on Ranma just to spite Ukyo and Shampoo...wait, maybe I can now better understand. Akane's just a vindictive bitch, that's all. I kid you not that when I read that part I actually screamed out: YOU BITCH!
However, somehow, I just knew that you were going to do the whole 'putting it on wrong' thing. Thank you for that, for Ranma's reaction to Ukyo and Shampoo's fighting was definitely a worthwhile read! And yes, I can easily imagine that Shampoo would be ecstatic to finally be hugged by Ranma, instead of doing the act herself.
Oh man, I really enjoyed this chapter. You held true to the respective characters' canon personalities, their strengths and weaknesses, and their schemes. I'd say that you captured Ukyo and Shampoo at their finest and worst in one chapter, a truly difficult deed to do for most fanfic authors on this site.
Thank you, thank you, THANK YOU for posting the revision of an old favorite of mine. I am GREATLY looking forward to the next chapter, so please don't make us wait for too long for the update, okay? Until next time...
| Vilkath chapter 2 . 6/17/2009
Interesting start for Shampoo and Ukyo, not so great for Ranma though. I mean seroiusly over inflated fanon to think Ranma would sleep through all that. Sure he's a heavy sleeper, but he's also trained to react to attacks while asleep and used to midnight abductions and attacks on Akane. I don't think he would sleep through an all out brawl, specialy one including 'not so subtle Akane'.
It's also bit disapionting how many times Ranma got knocked out in this particular chapter, he's not that bad of a fighter.. he takes akane hits all the time. I can understand the need to drive the plot but really made Ranma look rather pathetic in the exchanges to be beaten, slapped and carried around like some helpless civilian.
It's also a bit telling that no where in this chapter did Ranma's feelings taken into acount, but I suppose thats rather normal for Ranma 1/2. Still for setting up a 'real' relationship it's not so great Ukyuo and Shampoo fighting over Ranma like a piece of meat with no say.. specialy after Ukyo's thoughts about how Amazon males treated earlier.
| 7Sins chapter 2 . 6/16/2009
And you should be proud, this was a very nice chapter/idea, especially since non-senshi and non-tendo pairing fictions are so rare.