|Reviews for Flesh Against the Thorn|
| booklover5721 chapter 17 . 1/2
I LOVED it. please make a second one.
| lilyflower101 chapter 17 . 4/27/2014
loved it! :)
| StarDuchess chapter 17 . 2/4/2014
Cute storyline. You did rush through a lot of it and things like emotions and feelings could be fleshed out more as well as taking more time in the writing for descriptions. I liked the reactions of everyone in the beginning, but they all became too sappy in the end. I liked what you did with Ron, his reactions, his motivations for casting the spell, his remorse and eventual redemption. Those were well done. I did think that Harry forgave him a bit too easily, but that's also part of Harry's nature.
You do have a ton of spelling errors, and they are not ones found by a spell checker, so you either need a beta reader or you need to invest in editing yourself. I don't think you violated any rules of grammar (such as switching verb tenses), it was mostly word swaps, like 'quite' instead of 'quiet'. And you do not need to use the single quotes for nicknames; treat them as any other name.
| Xzeria chapter 17 . 10/10/2013
You so made me cry in this last chapter! I find it a great ay to finish two life end and two starts :)
| Allen's Matchmaker chapter 17 . 8/31/2013
I'm crying, and it's the third time today. Lucius. . . Snape. . . . Hope you're having a good time. . .
To the Potter Malfoys! Congrats and long live!
| MinxyKatt chapter 17 . 6/15/2013
I love this plot and the flow of the story, except maybe the end because I felt it quite rushed and it of abrupt. I like the idea of Harry and Draco having such a large family and the extended parts if it like Blaise and Charlie - coupling I never thought doable but worked quite nicely with this.
There was very little magic done though mentions if it, which made this story seem quite realistic in a way. I enjoyed that element quite a lot.
One quite big problem with this is that your spelling and grammar made it quite difficult to read the story. Incorrect words were used in certain places and it took away from the meaning of certain things and made it daunting to read - which really is a pity with such a great plot and storyline
Just work on those problems and your stories will be gold :)
I had fun reading this, even if a lot of us was gut-wrenching and sad in a way. Thanks for sharing
| Guest chapter 17 . 4/27/2013
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| TigerLilly-0129 chapter 17 . 12/31/2012
I liked it but wished you spent more time with the kids and not just all fast forwerd it but it was good :)
| DemeRain chapter 17 . 9/1/2012
10. Good grief. Thanks for sharing.
| Lumcer chapter 17 . 8/2/2012
I swear you know how to make me cry! But another wonderful story!
| Tassy Riddle chapter 17 . 7/31/2012
So beautiful! Indeed, i have tears in my eyes...
| Cristally08 chapter 17 . 7/14/2012
I didn't know if you wrote this as Mpreg without your warning. I loved Mpreg and glad to find this in your story especially MpregHarry. The minus was your grammar spelling but the good point is your plot is interesting. Having more children is fun. Good work
| Chai chapter 10 . 7/11/2012
erm... just thought you should know... bastard means a child that was born outside of marriage. so... it cant really apply in this case since they are going to be married when it is born. just thought i should let you know... i dont know if you knew or
| unknown chapter 3 . 5/31/2012
good story... check your spelling
| Draco mudiliar chapter 17 . 4/15/2012
harry and Draco with 12 chirldren was really cute.