|Reviews for Sekirei: The Fallen Sekirei|
| vienx.001 chapter 32 . 3/4
so miya in here is not minato sekirei ?
are u gonna make miya x minato FF ?
i waiting for that .
thanks the story
| moneygreen932 chapter 32 . 1/27
this story was truly refreshing... I liked it all the way through and i feel like you got into Yume's head and portrayed her character very well... although i don't think she would need to see how much Minato loves her over and over because she would be able to feel it and she maybe might embrace the competition but i liked the way you wrote for her in this story.. she was very comforting and protecting like i imagine she would be and she would be more possessive than Musubi which i also think she would be..
I also liked how you approached the realness of the harem aspect... instead of them being blindly okay with the harem their in they actually bring up that they would like more of Minato's time and some of them actually strive to be Minato's top girl instead of just Tsukiumi fighting and the rest of them being okay with being side girls.. so i loved the fact of that..
I also appreciate the change of adding Uzume to be with Minato as that's not a common trend on here.. I like Chiho too but i do think it is interesting to see how it would be like if she was with Minato... It's just a shame that she came in at the end of the story so we really couldn't grow close to her and see how she flourishes in this Minato Harem but ohhh well... hopefully she's in the Minato/Miya story if that's a harem as well...
Anyway thanks for writing and completing this wonderful story and i can't wait to start reading that next
| Duncan0Idaho chapter 27 . 10/21/2013
Waaaaaaaaaaaaaaaaait what? Uzume is not unwinged rather her Ashikabi is a girl who is dying in a hospital under higa's control.
| Duncan0Idaho chapter 3 . 10/20/2013
The first person POV is not doing much of a favor the fic to be honest, maybe you could leave FP POV for thoughts and third person POV for narration such as "My Husband never turned anyone away in need" Miya informs Yume.
| Duncan0Idaho chapter 1 . 10/20/2013
Not bad to be honest, however has the manga explained the death of Yume?
| Guest chapter 1 . 9/29/2013
Gotta be kidding me, musubi killed ?! It's not sekirie with out her
| OkagetheShadowKing chapter 1 . 7/15/2013
To Guest: Do not comment if you have do not have knowledge of the series and if you do not like it write your own story.
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/6/2013
Hmm, not the best story I have ever read. Not enough backstory for those you are fans but never heard of the series itself. And I suggest you stop having so much dialogue and a little more action in the story. It is sort of bland as well because not only did I not know what was going on, but I was kind of bored by it. Do a better job next time on your new stories.
| Tomon chapter 32 . 7/3/2013
Nice story :)
While it has many event that repeated itself such as some "discovery" or something along the lines or even sometimes contradict each other and the whole would deserver some polishing. It's still worth reading and I enjoyed your story. You also got big plus for Completed status :)
| Werewolf2300 chapter 32 . 6/22/2013
this is amazing your storys are some of the best i have ever read on this site
| raelarial1 chapter 32 . 4/29/2013
awesome story but i wish the chapters kept going and see what happens next
| FeelGood025 chapter 32 . 4/20/2013
This is one of the beast story I have ever read. Good job. the miya/minato is good story to start you should do it. You should I think do a story about minato and Karasuba
| devilhamster chapter 32 . 4/18/2013
well it was a really good story. though i would have wish they would achieve their peace and maybe have children as the ending. haha but the plot is really good. love it very much and thank you for this wonderful story. great job.
| Han-Ko chapter 32 . 3/16/2013
Thanks for writing and completing this, I enjoyed it. I would like to see a Miya/minato fic )
| valdiusmacto chapter 32 . 3/13/2013
Yay! A fanfiction for Sekirei that's actually finished! And of significant length! I admit that those two facts are what kept me reading. While the writing quality is solid, the plot is well executed, and the story overall nicely handled, it has a couple of major annoyances to it that normally would have had me drop the story.
The first is actually the perspective the story is written in. While you somehow made it sort of kind of halfway work. No mean feat that! There are many times when the first person perspective is just plain awkward in the story. While overall you managed to smooth this out(though clearer distinctions when the character focus shifts would go a long way to making it even better) when combined with the second annoyance it got headache inducing a few times. Which is normally when I would stop reading _.
The second problem...inconsistency. The whole story is rife with plot holes, comments that don't add up, characters that are seemingly forgotten about at times(a fairly well known hazard of having so many characters) and other such instances that make the observant reader go 'huh?'.
...With that out of the way, please don't take this as a flame! The fact that, despite these flaws, I found the story compelling enough to finish speaks well of your writing talent. Not only that, but I must admit that I find your version of the story preferable in many ways to the actual Manga/Anime. The ending was particularly brilliant and well executed. Not to mention not a little daring!
Thank you for your wonderful story, I fully intend to check out some of your other works!