|Reviews for Dramatic Foreshadowing|
| stormgurl101 chapter 1 . 3/6/2013
u know I absolutly love your work it's so... poetic yet suttle amazing work
| Guest chapter 4 . 12/28/2012
I love this story. You should keep at it :)
| Keeper of Tomes chapter 3 . 1/30/2009
The story isn't as fresh as it could be, but it's moving along at a quick enough pace to keep me engaged. Just a few technical suggestions.
Italics rather than bold font works better. It adds more emphasis to the actual speech, instead of just a visual image.
Semi-colons replace periods, not commas. Using them in places such as "To protect them; we have to reserve them," is not appropriate. If you replaced the semi-colon with a period, it would become, "To protect them. We have to reserve them." Try using a comma instead.
And maybe you could spell check...?
But your imagery is gorgeous. There's a beautiful painting you construct with words. Although, (and don't take this personally,) Dark Ace origin stories need abrupt twists along the line to keep them original, you have a great foundation.