This is dumb. I really hate it when personal development gets dragged out like this. I mean 40,000 words in and his animagus form is all problems and no actual, tangible, realized benefits? No powers beyond presence sense, telepathy, shape-shifting, and flight? And for no fuck of a reason he's just intrinsically unable to deal when dementors are around to the point of savagely attacking them in the stupidest way possible? Not to mention, apparently, the god mon of infinite adaptability can't handle the cold of winter? Ridiculous.

If this was an attempt at building tension you failed because all I've done is watch problems build up with no indication any of them are getting solved. That's 20% of your work so far with NO ACHIEVEMENTS to attribute to your main character and dumber and dumber problems piling up. At this point, just kill him off, it's like you're afraid to make him useful, you're grasping at canon events to frame everything else so desperately. It's all chew toy this, catnip that otherwise! Way to drag out the most asinine part of your character's life. All you've written is bringing into sharp relief how much he is wasting what abilities you have given his mew form.

My cousin said i dont care what you fink or like snape he had no right treated harry like jerk juat because james and sirius made snape live missarible when he was younger that give him no right to treated harry like that just because of old school gruch

James said wel atleast proud of son for completed tesk even if going have sirous talk with albus about that after done with beat up snivelus for puting my son into denmtension for no reason add all and screw you evil offsprigen of malfoy then lily said yea lh your right james so proud are son harry but also going have long talk severus and dumbledork about by put my son into tournament again his will

Mean weil dorcas said wel that when better thrn i exspect isnot right lily about your son being put inside tournanent after name out of gobelt of fire lily do hear where is then devon said save love is lily here nore james there both over pistoff and so is marlene then adam said icause your right i wonder what there talking about then sirenia said i dont but know those three problady insult snape for beind rude torch then as other three nodded agreed then they hear james said how dare filty bastard snivelus fink he get away with it by insult my son giving detension and just because he doesnot want to anser question then marlene said james please calm down know snape motherfuck filty bitch and jerk torch your son but doesnot mean he should disrespect teacher then james said my son show respect my son torch flity teacher like snivelus like treats him like dursley even dumlbedork tell my son to now that good one here fink about sinvelus respect or detension can take both up stick flity hook nose and so dumbledork for all i care sins agree it also go fuck him self old crazy bastard then marlene said james please calm down lily help tell husband relleas but lily shook head said as must want do that marly but not this time sins james totaly right that severus no right insult my son or question him sins not head of his house that title bylong to minevra and not him also hase no right give him a month detension for no reason sins harry did noting wrong that albus isnot calling off unown punishment just unacceptible this just proef his even bigger asshole then severus but one thing is for sure both going have sirous talk with albus and snape because will not stand by lets get away with this no will not then james said your right lily they wont get away it when they get afterlife because im sirous talk dumbleedork and sinvelus both about what did how treated are son and im also going beat living shit out of snivelus whebn get here for ecerying thing did to are son and godson nevile that start from moment both stap on train and got into hogwarts on first year and when they had first potion class sins snivelus fought torture are son harry and godson nevile both for 3 years or 6 years with inusult and unknow punishment for no reason then lets see how he like it when we torture him for 6 years and punish him that flity death eatters bastard like sirius and i say we dont care if chance side or if dumbledork trsut him because lily and i do not trust flity scumbag snivelus just like sirius doesnot trust him idare or are son

Mean weil afterlife dorcas said wel that was weird i wonder where james and lily when then adam said i heard agrue over there then max said know those two there problady agrue alot times he start then milo said yeah those two wil be agrue about anying ting brother even then self finish he then hear lily said james this all your fold and sirius you both corupted my son then james said lily isnt how can we corupted him by breaking then lily said of you are son deside hey going to visit forbbiden forest and tag with spider and cenaturs like you three then james said so whqt wrong that we did it too then lily said offcors is wrong james and how can say it are son is breaking somany rules that im going have gary hair then james said nothing breaking sometimes that holl piont having add hogwarts then lily said wel what call james is hexing people severus and lucius and rodolhpus and narrcisa and bellatrix and others then prongs said so those four idoits who are related to padfoot devert it after all pure blood nones they spuit inside house where sirius grow up do know how many times help him escaped true fire place flow network

Mean weil asdevon said canot stil hames and lily bycame anmegi like him and sirius then dorcas said you beter let james here that or broke rules from going into forbidden forest then james said that my boy harry and tecknackly speaking not breaking rulse if head master alow it then markene said stil is coisin even are old headmaster then james said no not marly if albus alow it then marlene said jamie that not true sins even if dumbleedore alow it coint as breaking rules if other treacher dont know then james and marlene as he said it not albus alow it for student to go explore forbbidean forest then it not and it is and it not and is then lily said well james dear i hate say this to you but marlene is right about son being rule break who hase your bad infulsend james neck for trouble

Great story

Arceus: Ah, I have now created a new world
Mew: Mew
Arceus: Where'd you come from?
Mew: Mew
Arceus: What do you mean "You've always been here"? I just made here!

So as of the chapter where you had Harry run away after the resurrection of Voldemort you have stopped writing a fanfiction called Harry mewter and started writing a commentary work because...?

I'm very disappointed that the hart behind the story seems to have been entirely thrown out the window but but props for everything prior to chapter 21.

love the story this is my second read and i sill live it thanks for writing it.

Nah. Sorry. Can't continue reading this. Again. Harry is literally a god. A Mew. One of the freest of all pokemon. They can travel the world with impunity. And Harry instinctually knows that.

There's just no way that he would have allowed himself to be turned human again with that insanely scared reaction he had. He's too carefree and it's just too much trouble.

The ministry can't track him. He's been doing magic the whole freaking time he's been at the Durleys after he became an animagis.

Did you forget your own writing. That he instinctually keeps himself warm with his own magic. And he floats. I highy doubt that takes a small amount of magic. He transforms. A lot. Again. Magic.

So. Either he's doing an undetectable form of magic. Or not really doing magic at all. Either way. Dumbledore saying he can't do magic while at the Dursleys is fucking stupid. And the fact that Harry doesn't realize all this is also fucking stupid.

Death eaters would NEVER be able to catch him. Unless you the author. Come up with some convoluted way. Such as. Sticking to canon when it literally makes no sense at all.

What's the point of making him a Mew if he's not going to be a Mew.

He was able to hide from and one shot a group of death eaters like it was nothing. But no that's illegal/s. The trace obviously isn't doing shit. He's been doing magic the whole freaking time after he became an animagus. He's using it constantly even if he doesn't think he is. He literally talks to animals.

The trace should be going off the charts. But no. He doesn't need to literally torture himself worse than the dementors to live with people that literally hate his guts. Fuck the blood wards, and fuck the durseleys.

Again. HES A GODDAMNED MEW!? WHAT THE FUCK IS THE POINT OF MAKING HIM A MEW IF HES NOT GOING TO ACT LIKE ONE!?

No. You made some overly angstie bullshit for the soul purpose of sticking to the stupid canon.

Even if he can't use his MEW invisibility yet. He can still wrap himself in his LITERALLY A DEATHLY HOLLOW SUPER POWERED INVISIBILITY CLOAK AND JUST FLY AWAY.

It's literally one of the most broken items in all of fiction. There is a spell that can detect humans. Homenum revelio. But it doesn't work on animagus animal forms.

So. Harry is literally immune to detection when using the cloak and his animagus form, which is now his normal form.

Except for Moody's eye(which probably doesnt even work on animagus). But Harry can easily avoid that sort of thing. Again. Literally a Mew that can fly.

As far as I can find. There is no animagis detecting spell, only one that can transform an animagus back into a human.

Which Harry can avoid easily by not being forced to go into situations where he would get hit with it because an author is trying really hard to stick with canon even though it doesn't make sense.

Anyways. I guess I'll try Fist of the Pikachu. Hopefully that will be better. Thanks for recommending it. HARRY CAN LITERALLY SEE THE FUTURE!? AGHHHH!? INFURIATING!?

Espion is the only one that makes sense. Because of her intelligence.

Yeah. I'm going to read this up to the first task. And if you haven't actually changed anything of importance in gonna drop this story.

The main reason I read fanfiction is to read new takes on my favorite franchises.

This is basically canon with extra steps. Literally. The only thing you technically actually changed was that buckbeak didn't have to run off with Sirius.

This is nuts. How is that even possible. I don't even think I could do that if I tried. Just by changing a few things. Like the main character literally becoming a god.

And the best friend becoming another god. Entei is a god by the way. All the legendaries are. Meanwhile Hermione is seriously just an evee. LMFAO.

Yeah. You haven't really changed anything. It's still just going by the book. Even when it shouldn't. For instance. The reason Slytherin didn't play in canon was because Draco was injured by buckbeak. That didn't happen. So they should have played before.

It's nuts. Cause you shocked the shit out of a group of death eaters. At least a few of them should have been paralyzed and left behind. But no. They all magically escaped somehow.

Petegrew escaped. Even though they could have easily caught him. Harry is. Again. A literal god. Whith seeking abilities. The ability to track scents better than any bloodhound. He could have tracked wormtail down easier than walking to the corner store for a bag chips and a soda.

But. No. He escaped. And I know for a fact he's going to do exactly what he did in canon. The only thing I see you actually changing is how Harry does the tasks. So. Honestly I want to see how fun and creative you get with them.

But. I'll probably lose interest after Voldemort gets revived. I'm guessing you will actually keep Cedric alive though. So. There's that at least.

Yes. Being the owner of the Firebolt is great honor indeed.

What the hell man. You made Ron of all people an Entei, but Hermione and Evee!? The fuck!?

Fun story but fucking hell!

There are hundreds of pokemon now, and you made the smartest witch of their age, the future minister of magic, a literal genius...a freaking Evee. The literal plainest of all pokemon. That's literally thee normal pokemon.

Even if you didn't make her a legendary. Which by the way. She should have been Suicune if Ron is Entei.

You could have at least made her something better than freaking Evee!?

At least like a Ninetails, or Alakazam, or something!

Other than that. This is a fun story. Good job.

This is my first Pokemon story, and it is amazing!
Thanks for sharing this story, love it till the end