|Reviews for Wizard of Kitsune|
| HeirOfRohan chapter 4 . 2/22
Would the old tune sound like "The road goes ever on and on..."? :D
| Poison Tree chapter 32 . 2/22
After having read this far I feel I'm obligated to attempt a review. I'm a bit of a rambler and this is a doozy so forgive me if it's overly long.
If someone asked me to describe this fic in one word I'd punch them in the head and tell them to stop being a pedantic moron. Good or Bad just won't do this monster justice, you know what I mean? I liked it for the most part but at chapter 33 I've begun to feel that it's work to keep reading this. I have to slog through it because what I view as mistakes have been piling up for a while now and they're just compounding.
I'm reminded of what you said in an Author's note in a previous chapter about why Kishimoto was doing certain things in the manga and whether he was 'pulling a Rowling on us' by letting characters die needlessly. Well I feel that no one in HP died needlessly, they died to make a point, to change the tone. In war people die, ANYONE can in fact die. The worst part is, they can die for stupid and unfair reasons. While, all we feel after is loss and grief for characters we've come to care about, and that same loss and grief comes to shape the characters that remain behind. That is the POINT! We're SUPPOSED to feel that! I'll defend Rowling on that front but not Kishimoto. Because I find that manga plot structure is nonexistent. They just pull stuff outta nowhere and/or retcon stuff because they feel like it, without any forethought at all. They ALL write one arc at a time and just make excuses for what happens in later arcs. But that's a digression, sorry.
The point is it feels like you're trying to SAVE everyone you personally like. Kimimaro? Really? I know he's cool and tragic but... Some people are hopeless. I'm not saying you can't I'm saying you didn't. Me personally if I read or watch something that I think doesn't work or follow logically then it's literally a paradox-in-universe. Something seen but not talked about or even explained because it isn't LEGITIMATELY explainable.
You: "Kimimaro's a good guy now."
You: "Because magic now shutup."
Me: "Well I'm not the writer, so whatever, moving on."
That's my attitude on stuff that happens IN CANON so as you might imagine it's also my attitude on a lot of things that happen in this fic. What the hell happened to Zabuza? You do know his arms were still working, right? Water jutsu? How about being a friggin' JONIN. HOW did he lose? HOW! I'm not angry at all and this is definitely not meant to be a flame but that question can't be stressed enough. He had NO business losing to regular thugs. I don't care if there were a thousand of them. And I'm not certain because I'm honestly having trouble believing that I read something THAT completely illogical but did the story actually insinuate or even flat-out SAY that NARUTO was a better SWORDSMAN than freaking ZABUZA!? Just no. I honestly don't feel I should even have to elaborate that point. Shadow clones DON'T cover this. They simply don't. Like 3 years of training also does NOT cover this.
None of this is to say that I didn't enjoy this fic. I did. I honestly did. I don't agree with the direction that a lot of things went in but it was really very entertaining and a fun time all around. Personally I think the ONE big mistake you made that could have completely nullified some of the issues if not most of them ENTIRELY is that you made the mistake of sticking to the formula instead of going big.
Question: Why does Naruto have to become a Genin at age 12-13? Because Kishimoto said so? Yeah this guy created a great universe/world concept but the longer it goes the more I'm convinced that at heart he's a hack. They're that young canon just for age appeal and so that Kishimoto has the luxury of starting slow and as a crutch for exposition. Making CHILDREN into FRONTLINE soldiers is a fucking stupid idea no matter how you look at it; and if you take the general atmosphere of things before the Third Exam Invasion arc as a barometer, even during the chuunin exams, then there IS no rush. You could have had Gandalf take him for 8 years instead of 2. Why don't they graduate when they're 16? Hell why not 20? Just push the timeline back who's gonna know? What were Orochimaru and Akatsuki doing for all that extra time? Whatever they were doing for that same amount of time before the canon start. Offscreen villain shit. It really isn't important.
As a CHILD Sasuke IS redeemable EVEN if you hate, loathe, or despise his character; he's a kid. If someone had actually BOTHERED to take the time and MAKE him listen and talk to the kid he COULD have been saved from himself. 6-10 more years of angsty-woe-is-me-grr-I-must-kill-Itachi-bullshit offscreen and when Naruto get's back at the age of 16-20 a fully trained/realized Wizard and an all around badass IN HIS OWN RIGHT and Sasuke is exactly what he is in your story but a TEENAGER or an ADULT? Yeah he's not so saveable any more. Suddenly it really actually is too late because: "You're a grown-up and a soldier now Uchiha! This is the REAL world and NO ONE gets everything they want so shut up and get over yourself!"
Would have made the Zabuza thing make a little more sense too. Though still not the 'I don't ACTUALLY have anything stopping me from being a complete badass JONIN and just wasting these guys or even just using my mist jutsu so they can't see me but I'm just gonna go ahead and die for NO reason now' thing. Why didn't Kakashi and Kurenai hit him from behind during his fight with Naruto anyway. They weren't even doing anything. Eh.
Also since when has Danzo wanted to rule the world. He's 80 or something, right? He's gonna rule the world for how long? It's just a pretty unrealistic goal for a guy that old. I've always thought of Danzo as an evil jerk but not really the MOST evil guy around. I mean he does just want Konoha to be strong, right? Not going about it the right way but... Anyway, ruling the world is for idiots, AND how's he gonna do that if he's allied with OROCHI-FRIGGIN-MARU...gonna be some kind of kerfuffle at some point in the future just saying. Since they're both scheming bastards they gotta know what the other wants, so they'd almost constantly be trying to stab the other in the back. I just don't see a realistic working relationship between them, sorry.
The Council could've been handled way better too. You don't get to just have the protagonist say things and then be all 'kthnxbye' after. That just doesn't work realistically. These people have connections and agendas. They WILL have questions, rebuttals, grievances, complaints, and legitimate objections. Because THAT is politics and bureaucracy at work and not even the greatest magics can stop bureaucracy. You need something more corrupt and wicked...money. Also, how did so many these start with Naruto and the-then-current-Hokage SURPRISING Danzo? My take on the guy was that he was spying on EVERYONE. He knew everyone who came or went and NOBODY got ANYTHING past him. Yeah, I'll admit that might just be my headcanon not sure.
Lastly, I THOROUGHLY ENJOYED that you had the gall to do this crossover at all and to do it as well as you did. Though, I'll admit I almost went "SCREW THIS!" at the "You shall not pass!" line in the wave arc. :)
I was all "COME ON! Are you really just gonna rip off Gandalf THAT blatantly you can't possibly be serious with this shi-" *scrolls down ONE INCH and reads author's note* "LOL that's hilarious!"
Had another moment with my brother that was fun:
Him- "Hey, what ya doin'"
Me- "Reading a Naruto/LOTR crossover fic. :)
Him- *long pause* :( "NO!"
Me- "But-" :(
Him- "NO!" :(
It was great. :)
So in summation I had a lot of fun reading and though I had some big complaints I enjoyed it overall.
-Good Job, Good Day, Good Luck, Good Writing (lame signout is lame)
| greaper3000 chapter 49 . 2/12
isn't Naruto, Hinata and most his friends minus the the ones form the Konoha 12 meant to live for hundreds of years if not a couple of thousand?
so why after around 80 is he a old man when they are meant to age at a reduce rate at a point hell Gandalf was around 1969 during the Tolkien story lines
| Clearmens chapter 49 . 1/29
Very well done.
| NPCrusader chapter 49 . 1/18
Excellent story. I first was very skeptical of a crossover between Naruto and the LotR universe but I have to say you pulled it off nicely. It wasn't 100% perfect, as there were some obvious "creative license" for certain bits, but those were nothing in the grand scheme of things. Very well done, LR :)
| taz0718two chapter 26 . 1/1
this a damn good story i think the next cross over story you should be a naruto duke nukem story that duke cam across nartuo in the his town being beaten up at age of 6 duke stopped them took him to see the third took him with him to train him in guns blades and all around duke stuff well you can come up with the rest
| lostsoldierS636 chapter 4 . 12/19/2013
So if Naruto is a decendant if Aragorn, then he's part elf. Sweet.
| Mythicatalyst chapter 49 . 12/9/2013
First friggin' crossover I ever read, and I just finished re-reading it.
Fabulous, as per the norm. I appreciate the effort put into this story, and I am happy to be able to say that this story still holds first place in the Naruto/Lotr crossover section.
A true masterpiece, well done.
| DarkPirateKing69 chapter 1 . 10/14/2013
i actually remember some of the tale of Huan and whatnot.. it was some LOTR encyclopedia that described it. it's been a while though.. maybe i come back to this when i'm done with my current readings.
| RandomWriter21 chapter 8 . 8/9/2013
Danzo is such a bastard...I hope he dies in a hole. Good story BTW
| TheFrenchBookworm chapter 1 . 7/28/2013
Wow, this looks complicated... I love it!
| Liquidblaze97 chapter 49 . 7/10/2013
Great, great job. This was a really good combination of two things I love. One of my favorite stories. Keep up the good work.
| Liquidblaze97 chapter 1 . 7/7/2013
This was really cool. Loved how explained the Biju in a way that makes sense in LOTR. DarkNexus did a great job in imitating Tolkien's writing style. I look forward to more!
| jebbus132 chapter 49 . 6/30/2013
Magnificent as always.
| Neo-Devil chapter 24 . 6/28/2013
nice start on getting gaara and Matsuri together. the Nidame Yellow Flash.