|Reviews for Metroid IV: Alone In The Stars|
| Omentuva chapter 12 . 7/21/2010
Well, that was an entertaining read. It's interesting to see how you fleshed out the story of Fusion and expanded upon some of the more tasty backroom politics, namely, the interest the Federation has in just about anything remotely looking like cloning. I have only played Zero Mission and Fusion in the Metroid series, so I may've been missing some background.
But we're not talking Prime here, it's Fusion, and yes, you did make Samus a grumpy person with the subtlety of a morningstar smashing into a computer, but eh, it fit. I liked the addition of Ridley as an affably evil hitchhiker. Another good point was the slew of insults you threw at Adam. It's hard to get away with Monty Python in a Sci-Fi setting, but it fit here.
| Sonicthehero5602 chapter 12 . 5/24/2010
Amazing job! I loved this story, and it's a great representation of Metroid Fusion. It was a good length, and the worst criticism I could give is a rare typo, which everyone has. Keep writing!
| Javilin Yamato chapter 2 . 4/14/2010
lol that remark referring to monopoly was hilarious rofl! but yeah this story is pretty good so far!
| Andi Aradan chapter 12 . 3/9/2010
Fabulous novelization, I loved every word. I think I'll go rummage through the rest of your library. :)
| NNAA11 chapter 9 . 2/28/2010
A good chapter was made even better by mentioning Mike the TV from Reboot.
All that was missing was Bucket-o-nothing along with ninety-nine ninety-nine ninety-nine.
| Zefie Kirasagi chapter 12 . 10/5/2009
From discovering the story at 12:36 AM this morning to finishing it now at 5:55 AM, I truly feel that I've never seen a better novelization of a video game yet anywhere. This is EXACTLY how I would see the story unfold with the extra details surrounding it. I loved the extra stories and characters added in, which gave the story so much more depth. The redefining of the relationships between Adam and Samus, and particularly Ridley and Samus, were downright genius.
There's so much more I should say but I desperately need to sleep. But this work of fanfiction is truly incredible, and I'll be remembering it for a long while.
| Adam5396 chapter 2 . 10/2/2009
This, like all your stories, is great. I don't really care how your story fits in with the game, as long as it's good.
I can't pick my favourite part of the story. But I did like the bit where Samus figures out that Ridley is in her head.
| StoppingMotors chapter 9 . 8/17/2009
That Kingdom Hearts ref made my day.
This is an awesome, awesome fanfic. I haven't played the games so novelizations are, well, novel but I don't doubt that if I had played the games this would be entertaining none the less. An all-around well-written piece of work. ;D
-Ridley's voice being introduced slowly, with Samus thinking it's part of her thought patterns. For some reason fanfic-ers seem terribly invested in the idea that strange thoughts would be immediately identified as being 'not mine'. Makes sense in universes where soul-hopping happens on a regular basis. Where it doesn't...
-The pacing of the fic - some fighting, some flashbacks and enough 'new' things that we just keep coming back for more. ;D
-Ridley/Samus interaction. Most of the time it's presented as so very twisted and while there may be undertones of such here their comraderie/spite/whathaveyou is so very amusing. And to the non-gaming neophyte it's also *believable* in its own wacky way, holovids and all. I admit Ridley's diction threw me for a loop before I realized that the Space Pirates somehow received Federation broadcasting. If they can bring the dead back to life, why not?
Eh... nothing that springs to mind. I know how constructive criticism (as opposed to unreserved praise) is best and yadda yadda but I can't really think of anything.
Thank you for writing this!
| anonymous chapter 12 . 7/19/2009
completey amazing, start to finish! I love the depth you put into this already enthralling storyline, all the additions and plot enhancements were excellent and matched up seamlessly. Congrats and thank you for such an incredible story!
| Anonymous chapter 12 . 7/4/2009
Normally, I find novelizations to be pretty dull-they simply repeat the exact events and words of the games. However, this story is a rare exception. It does a fantastic job of translating the video game to written form; the bits that you've added really enhance the experience and give your story more depth. I hope to see more from you, especially further Metroid fics. The way you ended this one leaves open quite a few possibilities for a sequel of some kind.
One thing that seemed a little contrived was how Samus put Ridley's mind directly into a brain of his own with no apparent trouble, or even any side effects. Overall, however, this is an excellent effort, and I'm going to go straight to your Super Metroid novelization.
| FFfanboyX chapter 12 . 6/22/2009
You did pretty good on this one. I especially liked the banter between Samus and Ridley-to be quite honest, it's rare to see a situation where those two are together in a room long enough to hold a full conversation without someone dying. Oh, and don't WORRY me like that-saying 'Last Author's Note' at the end of the epilogue...
| Shawn C chapter 12 . 6/21/2009
OK, so this isn't so much for your Fusion novelisation, but for your work in general. I'll say first off that you are honestly one of the best writers I've had the pleasure of reading in a *very* long time. Besides that, I appreciate the nods you give to actual canon/real material in the games you novelise, while still giving it your own... touch. That said, I really don't have any specific criticism to give other than yelling at FanFiction to let you keep your scene breaks - it's kind of jarring sometimes and leads to confusion (at least for me).
Keep up the great work, hope to see more of your work whenever you can!
P.S. BoF2 novelisation please :D
| Red Chaos Mage chapter 12 . 6/17/2009
Another job very well done. I'm not sure if there's anything I can add in terms of advice that hasn't already been said, but I'll put in my two cents anyway.
The Nav Room scene went smoother than I expected. I admit, it didn't occur to me that Samus used Adam's name so infrequently that using it then would pack a punch regardless. I also think the reasoning behind the Omega Metroid attacking (and being bigger than normal) was well done, though I think you could have also explained it by having it get some Sys-Gro somehow and have the insanity be a side effect... But your way works just as well. Again, good job.
I'm glad you found a way to keep Ridley in the thick of things. He was always one of my favorite game characters. I also found it fitting that Todar's end was just as he had claimed Adam's human form had been. He always did rub me the wrong way.
Personally, I'd vote you go with Link's Awakening next. While I've played (and beaten) both games, I think LA would be less complicated to work with (less behind-the-scenes conspiracy crap to worry about) but I'll be faithfully following whatever you happen to go with.
So, until next time, fare thee well Lord Magus.
| Necrovore chapter 12 . 6/17/2009
Great story. The personality and hive mind of the X was a very nice touch. How you handled the conspiracy by the Federation also added a nice bit of depth to the story.
| GG Crono chapter 12 . 6/16/2009
If you plan on doing Breath of Fire 2, you should play the re-translation of it that was done recently, if you haven't already. It's really a phenomenal work.
That said, I'll keep this short. Good story, man.