Reviews for Time's Lullaby
kariza2013 chapter 13 . 11/19/2013
like it!
SakuraKoi chapter 13 . 9/18/2013
So good
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SakuraKoi chapter 8 . 9/18/2013
Oh God
SakuraKoi chapter 7 . 9/18/2013
Oh my Merlin!
SakuraKoi chapter 6 . 9/18/2013
SakuraKoi chapter 5 . 9/18/2013
Me to Harry me to.
SakuraKoi chapter 4 . 9/18/2013
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SakuraKoi chapter 1 . 9/18/2013
No not that evil song!
Sirenfox chapter 11 . 9/3/2013
Your story is very interesting and I can see it's potential to be really great. I'm going to give you a small challenge now to make it even better, whether you take this challenge or not is up to you. Now, in almost all the recent chapters I've noticed you end the chapter with a small list of explanations. When you you find yourself doing this go back to the story where each piece of the list originates from and flesh it out so we understand what is going on in the story instead of explaining it at the end, this will make the story sound smoother to the reader which will in turn keep them reading. Here's an example for the hardest of these 'lists'...
1-sneezing when trying not to laugh:
Harry could feel a tickle of laughter build in the back of his throat when his father turned on him, obviously attempting to appear intimidating. Harry wasn't fooled, but forced back his laughter. There was no point in blowing their cover to soon, they would need it in the future.
...(you put in some of what happened in the class here)...The tickle slowly built back up as his father spoke and Harry was trying so hard to ignore it like a good little kitty, but it was impossible. He squeezed his eyes shut and held his breath but nothing worked. The tickle of laughter just got harder and harder to ignore. But harry wasn't going to let it beat him, no sir he was not. He..."Achoo!"
Harry blinked in surprise. Professor Snape blinked back at him, unimpressed.
"Well?" His father snapped.
Harry quickly bit out the answer, feeling that irritating tickle of laughter build up at the absurdity of the moment. He tried to fight the building giggles and ended up sneezing...again.
Well, wasn't that just lovely, he thought irritably. He would either have to laugh, or sneeze. What an annoying little quirk he'd developed.
Anyway, like I said, this is just a little food for thought. Great chapter, I love your little Harry, he's darling...and I absolutely love the last part where he cuddled up to pansy's stomach, my last kitten used to do that, especially when my stomach was bare and she could feel the heat of my skin. She was adorable like that.
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