this story is fire I hope even if it's very unlikely I hope this gets finished

hay don't listen to these haters they just mad they can do what you can I love the fanfic.
if you gave up on it its ok but know I love it.

aaaa its bein 5 years plz make another chapter.

I'm sorry... I couldn't help but laugh. I'm hoping the catalyst for this story isn't just he got harshly rejected by some vapid mean preteen bitch.

I would like to read your old version if possible. I practically hated the fact that you're licking Uchiha ass in this one

There's one thing I can't make any sense of in all the Naruto fanfics I've read do far, Sasuke was literally spoon-fed everything post the Uchiha clan massacre and he had been a disappointment in Fugaku's eyes, how the hell does every author label him as talented? True he was strong but he got everything served on a silver platter so saying he was talented is like saying sunlight is black in color

I'm going to start off by saying I really do like this start. I honestly dont mind the one piece techniques and I always chuckle at the non usage of shadow clones for the paperwork and his desperation to be rid of that evil. Fuck I have only 1 hour of paperwork weekly and i hate it. I'd be beating myself up to for not seeing the obvious.

This is going to seem pety to pick at but like steel toe boots? I understand you wrote that store like 5evers ago but if you think about it the shinobi shoes are intentionally designed the way they are for a purpose. Itd be almost impossible for him to use chakra walking techniques with an enclosed shoe with that thick of a sole. Especially since metal does 2 things with basic chakra depending on the metal. Which is conduct it and hold it which would make it even more impossible to surface and water walk or second or disrupts it unless you're using the magnet release so again harder water walking. Even from the beginning kishimoto always made sure that anyone using chakra from part of their body was at most only covered up by thin material or completely open to the air hence an open but supportable shoe design. What few boots we see in Naruto were also open toe. Besides they can reinforce their bodies with chakra why would they even need a thin steel plate to protect their toes like that when anything they can't endure with chakra reinforcement would crush the plate and do more damage to their toes than just breaking them would in the first place. Even Han who wore thick armor like clothing to aid his steam based boil release had much thinner material for the shoes when you look at his design rather than full on thick armored boots. Like I said its stupidly pety of me but leather clothes and steel toe boots have become a pet peeve of mine in fanfiction since people throw them on characters to look "badass and cool" when they throw out the function of why those clothing types were invented and it makes the characters look stupid instead. It's just ugh. I'm sorry I'm gonna stop. First chapters pretty good though I can just ignore the boots and pretend they're black shinobi sandals. Though 2 months is stupidly long time for teams to be made after graduating effective boot camp. I would like to point out that Naruto can just use Kage Bunshin to get the "time" he needs by having them practice the katas for getting the proper form done while he works on the physical conditioning they cant. He also heals so stupidly fast that the weighted training would be accelerated for him. Considering he'd heal the micro tears used to build it up in a couple hours what would take people days. His innately high stamina also proves he effectively shrugs off the bi product that causes fatigue in the first place as well so short intense work outs to build strength would boom for him.

come back I needs more!

yup I'm out.

oh this is a stupid bloonline. Jesus christ. this has been set up decently, but the bloodline is fucking stupid and the taijutsu styles are fucking stupid. I'm out

seriously teaching a Shinobi a fighting style that only uses legs is so fucking stupid.

oh one piece styles... I was hoping for like uzumaki or Minato style

Are you serious im not reading this anymore sorry but since you brought a child into the picture i cant

wowww is this a food ward crossover

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