Reviews for Indecent Proposal
ladygagafan99 chapter 1 . 5/21/2010
Wow...that was crazy intense!

Loved it! really, really well writen...have you considered turning it into a full story

thanks for an epic one shot!
Dulcie chapter 1 . 5/12/2010
Please please continue with this story!
angalpari13 chapter 1 . 5/5/2010
what u need to write more please make this story longer
lasvegas chapter 1 . 4/20/2010
I read the original draft and thought it was great, but the characters and scenes are even more developed now since you've edited. We really see how lonely Edward is and how torn Bella is between what her head and heart are telling her to do. I loved it and am thrilled to hear you're continuing "It Started with Indecency" after revamping the already posted chapters as well! I'm with whatever keeps you sane, as you put it, and keeps us entertained! Thanks for sharing the story with us in the first place.
Z. Nicole chapter 1 . 4/7/2010
Wow, that was amazing! I loved it and would def read more if her was anymore to read...
Litany Gone chapter 1 . 4/6/2010
The edited version looks better from my pov...
2402a chapter 1 . 4/1/2010
How married is she? I love that.

I don't totally remember the first o/s. But i do know that I loved this one. I so look forward to more.
azure0610 chapter 1 . 3/31/2010
I read the original and I don't really see a difference? What changed?

Honestly, the ONLY real problem I had was Bella being so young and uneducated. Age is just a number but she's going to look like a gold digger after Edward and the fact that she had no college degree whatsoever. Not even something online made her look a few steps from trailer park.

I know that sounds harsh and no offense to people who live in trailers but up against Mr. Hot Bill Gates net worth Edward. Bella is like a diner waitress. She didn't have to go to Harvard but it just looked really bad and had me cringing. I mean she has to have something for herself. She doesn't work. Has not real education, no trade degree or skill. How could she possibly be on Edward's arm and NOT look like a gold digger? It was bad enough she was 22 but jeez can the girl have a degree at least so she COULD actually get a decent job and not look like she'd live off Edward. They already have enough odds stacked against them. People perceiving her as a gold digger is okay...her basically having the resume of one is bad.

I never got how Jake was the CEO right? Of some company where he was 3mil in the hole. You have to have some education of business. The got married like RIGHT out of high school and were dirt poor so I know Jake didn't go to college either. I know it's his family's business but still.
SexyBelle chapter 1 . 2/20/2010
Jake is selfish and I dont like him!
Charmie77 chapter 1 . 2/15/2010
okay so this was rec'd to me recently over at twilighted - great one shot! i typically don't enjoy one shots but this one particularly was very good!
Lizzie05 chapter 1 . 1/21/2010
This was so good. I hated that Bella was so in loe with jake, but than you for changing it. Edward and Bella just belong together.
arshi chapter 2 . 1/8/2010
loved it...
ColfaxBella chapter 1 . 12/28/2009
Great one shot! I like how you developed the characters and the ending killed me. I'm looking forward to reading your follow-up. Cheers! -Jen
zen2592 chapter 1 . 12/21/2009
that was awesome, great writing!
gossip-bangkok chapter 1 . 12/9/2009

I love it!
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