Reviews for The Return of The Princess
StarWarsSkyrim51 chapter 24 . 3/30
I loved it.
Guest chapter 5 . 7/1/2016
Not trying to be at all offensive or negative, but I think you would do well to get a beta to edit the chapters.
CharlieBoneFan chapter 24 . 4/11/2016
Great story!
SarahlouiseDodge chapter 24 . 9/2/2015
Really fast paced maybe lacking in a little detail and description but it was a nice full story which wasn't too felt a little rushed
PrayerGirl chapter 24 . 7/16/2015
This was a pretty good story!
Shiori Kudo chapter 13 . 2/19/2015
"But because you are what you don't believe he can't." doesn't make sense.
Guest chapter 6 . 12/11/2014
my sister would love that
Fuzzygoblins chapter 19 . 11/23/2013
O-o ...nope...
Opalbrat chapter 24 . 6/30/2013
Love this story!
Ange noir Ayame chapter 11 . 5/5/2013
Lol looks like oberons sleeping on the couch tonight.
Honoria Granger chapter 17 . 2/22/2013
Toby's "Hungary"? You mean he's a Middle European nation whose capital is Budapest? :D

Also, it's dining room, not dinning room. And again with the fifth-teen.

And why for the sake of the Labyrinth itself does Jareth have to sleep on a sofa in his study? He's the KING! He lives in a CASTLE! I'm quite sure there's a spare bedroom he could use, just for now. It's all these little dumb things, again, that really undermine your story and annoy the reader.

And in the previous chapter, you were totally confusing about who Jareth's father. It sounded as if Tynan was, or even Keiran.
Honoria Granger chapter 10 . 2/22/2013
Once again: fifteen, not fifth-teen. It goes like this: thirteen, fourteen, fifteen, sixteen, seventeen, eighteen, nineteen. You're so consistent in your misuse I fear you were badly taught and remembered all too well...
Honoria Granger chapter 9 . 2/22/2013
It's generally and historically Oberon and Titania, not Tatiana, which is a Russian name, but of course you can do as you please. It's also "taught", not "teached", and "have chosen", not "have choosed." Such mistakes (and your poor punctuation) greatly diminish your authorly authority and make people think you're careless and uneducated. Which is a pity, because your stories are terrific otherwise...
theythinkimcrazy chapter 12 . 12/17/2012
just curious but did you get the name keiran from the wicked lovely series?
Guest chapter 3 . 11/16/2012
I've noticed it twice now, you write "fith-teen" instead of the proper "fifteen". Thought I'd let you know :)
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