|Reviews for Love Me, Sensei|
| A Shady Rock chapter 26 . 3/25
I absolutely adored this -
I've been really sick lately so I have nothing better to do than read. I read this in like a day :p (which is rare for me) .
I loved this to pieces and I can't wait to read more from you because honestly this is a very well written story. Some of the transitions were a bit jumpy but overall a magnificent read!
| shuuemura chapter 26 . 3/19
Wow! Im not for long reviews but just had to leave this note (even thoughthe writer prob stopped writing years go). Brilliant writing, storyline, and character development. This one left a lasting impression. At first i was skeptical on the age difference and the story itself, but in the end, by far one of the best ive read so far! Wished you were still writing!
| akatsukireunites chapter 26 . 1/28
aw this was so cute! thx for the story!
| Saij Spellhart chapter 26 . 12/27/2014
Okay, let's start off by saying I read over the reviews of this story. Mostly just skimmed the most recent.
Now let's be honest I read this story and followed it for real when I was back in high school. But it left such an impression on me in the next 5 years that I never forgot it. Infancy I occasionally felt fondly enough of it to revisit sections of the story and reread them.
Sure there were errors, sure the grammar was off, and you did sometimes turn language on its ear. But so have hundreds of other writers who immersed themselves in Japanese manga and anime both dubbed and subbed. We come out having a half-baked understanding, and make a Spanglish equivalent. So it never bothered me.
I loved and still lived the story. And when I went out seeking writers to commission, you were on my list. Because I know you can write well. Even if some asshat reviewer says otherwise. You don't have to be a perfect writer to write a great story. You just have to be passionate.
I notice that ba-humbug of a person didn't even sign in to leave it. Too ashamed to leave room for a reply or give you a chance to explain yourself. What a prick. I think the last few reviews on a story complete should be good and positive. So here's mine again after 5 long years. I hope you are doing well.
| Arg chapter 26 . 12/25/2014
So many problems in this story interspersed with some brilliant writing. Errors are to be expected of most stories when they reach a certain length, but that means you have to be more careful and put forth more effort. That can be hard to do, because once a story reaches a point of saturation, it becomes a living thing of it's own and writing flows smother and the plot and evolution write themselves. THEN it becomes a problem knowing when to put it to bed and let it live on in memory and dreams. There are tons of grammatical points that should be addressed, but worse are the incorrect word usage: like 'swapped his hand away.' should be "swatted..." Relying on spellcheckers get's you only so far. Do you here. Do you hear me now?
Lemons... Really? God only knows what you know about sex. I'll tell you this much they're beyond reason and more like something out of a bad porn movie.
Language. PICK ONE! Idiot. O.O maybe you'll understand it if I call you 'baka,' instead?
Theme. Your theme has most of it's problems caused by inconsistency stemming from your character development. Ichigo comes off as a pedophile and Rukia is at one moment an adolescent, the next she's 18?! You're characters lack continuity and leaves the reader struggling for understanding.
Canon. This really shouldn't even be considered AU. You've taken some of the character traits and assigned them a name, then rambled off down your own bunny hole. That's too bad, as with polish and effort, you could work a real story out of this thing that does't rely on Kubo's work. To keep it manageable, create your own characters with their own back story. Well over 50% of the characters in here were just names, the others paper thin. Writing a character is like molding clay, you need substance and then you need form to make it into anything. Narrow your characters down to a handful. Over a third of this is just sex scenes anyway ... I want that I can put on a porn video! I wanted a story!
The good. Almost every chapter had something good in the writing and style that kept me reading all the way through this. True, I skimmed a lot of the junk and wanted to bitch-slap you every time you wrote something like 2000 yen (a/n about $20). First, why give a price?! Second, when has grocery shopping ever ended in those type of numbers. BUT MAINLY, if you have to explain it to your audience, then your material is in the wrong freaking language! Be smart, just write, "She paid the bill and walked out feeling she was overcharged..." or some such nonsense.
The good. I already mentioned it, but it bears repeating. You do have a unique style that can be engaging when it's working. I could pick your writing out of several if I was doing a comparison. Yes, people's styles are similar; like a coin, or a thumbprint, etc..., similar but unique.
Now I'll have to see if you've written anything recent and if your style has progressed. I hope so ... it's not fun leaving reviews so I hope you appreciate it. Otherwise I can just write like others: Grate sotry dont stop. If that's your targeted audience then just draw some pictures and keep your vocabulary and syntax to the third grade level.
| MaiTwilight chapter 26 . 12/25/2014
I had a big ass smile the whole time, even when I was crying at the propsal, swear on me mum!
| yuck chapter 15 . 12/25/2014
He pried her shit open? That's gross. This is why you proof read your work. To catch word errors, read it backwards wordby-word. Really? Surely someone's pointeed this out to you by now and you still haven't fixed it? That's just deplorable. jsm
| WTF chapter 4 . 12/24/2014
Okay... Now what sort of thing have you done? What are the ages of these people? I was willing to accept Ichigo as a prodigy and being younger, but he apparently also babysat the others? Putting best numbers on any of this still put's Ichigo at least 21 and unless she's stupid and was held back in school-but being class rep and all, makes that unlikely-she can't even be older than 17. You're on dangerous ground and you should once again consider your audience and theme. Statutory stuff doesn't really concern me in literature outside of the realm that you owe your reader's the courtesy to be upfront about such things. Call it "writer's integrity." Also, this is becoming so far removed from the canon characters that I'd question whether this is correctly a "Bleach" fanfic. Just using names and images isn't going to cut mustard ... more like cheese, which makes your reader think you stink. jsm
| Annoying things chapter 3 . 12/24/2014
Lot's of annoying things going on interspersed with some good writing. Frankly the best parts are the one's where you actually recount basic scenes from the original. Anyway, since I suspect that there's going to be a lot and because I only get one review per chapter, I'll just tag the first one's that hit me or I can remember. SO... First: Author's notes don't belong in the story. Who's your audience (aka reader) that needs to be told what a yen is? ANY time you break the 'fourth wall,' you detract from the story. This is good for a story that has that element imbued in it, but this is obviously not that genre. Second: Ding Ding Ding?! For cat's sake! Don't do stupid things like that. It's like going, "knock knock. He knocked on the door." Stupid, right?! Just say the bell rang... Okay, that's enough for this chapter... jsm
| Really chapter 1 . 12/24/2014
When was the last time you saw someone 'skipping' down a street? And was that person older than five? Please consider context when writing ... I mean, it's the 3rd sentence and already I've got this loony character in my mind. Yuck!
| MaiTwilight chapter 23 . 12/24/2014
I think I'm bipolar now, thanks to this chapter...
| 23ebandl chapter 26 . 9/22/2014
I LOVE THIS FANFIC! WHY DID YOU HAVE TO END IT!? YOU FRIGGIN BASTURD
| 23ebandl chapter 1 . 9/19/2014
dat was awesome! (im actually reading chapter 25!)
| Guest chapter 26 . 5/27/2014
I can't help but feeling amazing! Historical one.
| ImmortalEvans chapter 26 . 4/16/2014
A thanks is really in order here..really cool fanfic I loved it to the very end I hope I can read more of your stories..this story will always be special to me for its the first IchigoXRukia fanfic I finished...again AWESOME job yo!