Reviews for Microadventure in Galaxy High, Episode 1
The SPAZtastic Lawlrus chapter 1 . 6/21/2012
Is English not your first language? You did a good job but bits and pieces didn't make sense.

Looks like a good start! Rather than using dashes (-) to show dialogue, use quotation marks (") around the spoken words.

Good luck!
BookJunkie chapter 1 . 8/3/2009
I've really enjoyed reading the start of your story - although I can see that English is not your first language - why not write your story in your first language too?

It's nice to see such effort you put in your writing!

Good job! D