Reviews for Stay Just a Little Longer
shaz308 chapter 5 . 9/8/2014
Lucky he finally came to his senses. Poor Bella.
Maplestyle chapter 5 . 9/8/2014
OMG I loved this! I still read that story on occasion! Thanks for sharing this!
Taylor9901 chapter 5 . 9/8/2014
Awe. I loved it.
ChristyWIX chapter 4 . 7/18/2014
That was a wonderful lemon . . . pretty hot one too.
ChristyWIX chapter 3 . 7/18/2014
I liked that outtake. And, I can clearly see when the light bulb went off in your head and you scrapped this and started over . . . with him waking up over hearing the 'lawn mower'. It is kind of fascinating to learn how the minds of authors start off in one direction . . . and then change off into another. Both the original and this one were great. Thanks for sharing this.
ChristyWIX chapter 2 . 7/15/2014
This was really a fun version. I liked it all. I'm glad you cut the part about Alice forcing underwear on Bella in what was basically their first meeting of one another. However, I really hope you added it back into the story in a later chapter . . . as it deserved to se the light of day in a real chapter, not just an outtake. I really liked when Bella told Edward that they will like him and not to worry. As, it finally showed that she may have strength in her after all . . . something that hasn't showed up yet in the real story.
ChristyWIX chapter 1 . 7/15/2014
I actually really liked this version of chapter thirteen. I liked the way the conversation between Alice and Edward flowed in it. It wasn't as angry as the other version. AxE were kind of pissy with each other in the real ch13 and this one they were more sibling like. I liked that better. Although, the real ch13 had the better, 'I'm going to marry her', moment by far. This one just merely had him think it. I also like the real ch13 version of Angela and Edward entering the store together . . . having met in the parking lot . . . much better than this version of her already behind the counter. Still fun to read the alternate.
jus2read chapter 4 . 6/6/2014
So cool seeing how the chapter was before it was changed slightly- fascinating to see a story grow amd change like that :)
xxx
LesleyLunaCullen chapter 2 . 11/10/2013
Still don't get the Rose friendship. There is protecting your friends& then there is being a selfish bitch & she fits the latter category. Other than giving bella a pep talk regarding sex, I thought she was a complete bitch and had no clue why Angela or bella would enjoy her company.
Kim Ginsberg chapter 4 . 9/4/2012
oh yeah!
frenchsong87 chapter 4 . 10/2/2011
Loved them! Are you going to write any futuretakes instead of a sequel?
disawesome chapter 4 . 9/14/2011
Awesome! Maybe u can do an outtake about the public finding out that they're engaged! :)
OcSickGirl chapter 4 . 8/2/2011
Yeah I think I would choose sex over sleep if Sexward was in my bed also!
OcSickGirl chapter 3 . 8/2/2011
Mmmmm...Edward's head in my lap...my fingers in his hair...hmmmm...sexy
OcSickGirl chapter 2 . 8/2/2011
I love pushy Alice!
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