Reviews for Golden Moon |
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Bobbi chapter 23 . 11/1 Is he gonna eat a whale |
Guest chapter 9 . 10/30 I love your version of Jake - it’s fun seeing them banter and have normal conversations. I hate how intense, brooding and pushy he turned out to be after a while in the films (read the books ages ago so I don’t remember if he was like that in the books too). You captured the best parts of him in your story. Thank you 3 |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 55 . 9/3 first, super disappointing that this author never posted the sequel and mikes stand alone story. hope the author is ok. second, the story was awesome and only one negative thing from me. (no i didnt articularly like how stupid bella was sometimes but this bella is still miles etter than the original bella. we dont have to like the characters the way they are written to accept a good story for what it is) my main issue is jasper telling bella that edward definitely loved bella because he felt his love for her himself, but alice admits edward ever loved her at all and it was just her silent mind. bit of a plot hole. i think it was just forgotten about. not the biggest plot hole ve ever seen |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 30 . 8/29 what if laurent had waited one more day?! jasoer was an idiot and so was bella. they both knew laurent was coming. |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 29 . 8/28 so Jasper is just going to leave bella unprotected evn after alice told him laurent was watching her and might kill her? |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 23 . 8/28 great story so far. im still so anxious about alice. you are killing me! |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 19 . 8/27 how is having your hands entwined behind your head any part of a quintessential cowboy pose? ive never seen anyone stand like that in real life. the rest of it, sure. is he working on his modelling poses or something? was he laying down? just standing like that waiting for her, its a bit.. douchey? i could totally see edward doing that is what im saying. lol |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 15 . 8/27 im trying to like this story, but its hard. i want to give them a chance to figure it out in a way that is acceptable to Alice, but if they cheat, ill absolutely hate them. |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 14 . 8/27 im assuming jasper and alice went their seperate ways and hes too dense to tell her.. otherwise they are both being horrible. either way, bella has zero excuses. she thinks they are mates. she should be going toe to toe with him over flirting with her. instead, shes flirting right back. gross. hopefully they figure that mess out sooner than later. |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 10 . 8/26 the fact that ella feels she NEEDS to lie to her father at 18nyrs old about hanging out with. 19byear old alone os a bit alarming. being grounded for it though? hmm. hopefully charlie isnt that ridiculous. |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 7 . 8/26 tyler never forgave HER?! he just decided he was taking her to prom and showed upbat her house without ever asking her to prom, but hes mad she didnt go with him? still? ever? at all? id be pissed and creeped all the way out. edward or no edward id have gone all the way off and refused to ever be anywhere near him again outside of classes. freakin weirdo. |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 5 . 8/26 the treaty wasnt "ancient" it was made in the 1930s. not even a century earlier. |
gr8asholio1986 chapter 1 . 8/26 thank goodness! one think i never understood about BookBella is that high school girls are great at faking it when we have to! the whole catatonic crap and scaring her parents with all that was ridiculous. in high school, i felt like my world was ending several times for more legitimate reasons and held my shit together in front of everyone but my best friend. im not saying they bought it 100% of the time completely, but Bella was ridiculous. |
Griffalope chapter 48 . 8/6 I really like your writing, and this story has been amazing. You're so talented, make no mistake about that. That being said, I have made it all the way to chapter 48, but its starting to become difficult to continue reading. You've acknowledged it a few times, but the way this forced separation is dragged out, purely due to the stubbornness of the characters is really drawn out. I feel like I've dedicated the last two hours of reading solely to pointless angst. I know that relationships do sometimes end this way, love sometimes isn't enough, but some editing purely for the pace of the story might have been in order. I'm going to stick it out, because I'm invested, but this section is really a slog. |
Rylieellie chapter 55 . 5/1 beautiful story, wish i could see bella turn vamp but this was lovely |