|Reviews for Forever Love|
| A Soulless Poet chapter 1 . 3/5/2013
that was cute!
| CrazydudeLOL chapter 1 . 10/7/2012
AHHHHHHHHH MAKE ANOTHER CHAPTER AND THEN TELL ME WHEN YOU DO!
| HanjiTitan chapter 1 . 4/12/2011
i COULD CARE LESS ABOUT SPELLING ERRORS! good concept thats all that matters...and wheres yuki through all this? listening in the next room? hahaa
| Tech-Man chapter 1 . 5/12/2010
Well, it was interesting. I did enjoy the story. I think that Kyou was a little out of character in some of it, but that really wasn't bad. I liked it. Good work.
| Moonstone212 chapter 1 . 11/9/2009
YEA! AWSOME STORY! ME LIKEY! ;D
| Amanda Lynn Ferguson Shepherd chapter 1 . 10/15/2009
| MayContainRandomness chapter 1 . 6/6/2009
lol! As I read this I thought of Yuki in the next room listening and thinking WTF is going on in there? He will be tormented for life XD
| marigold-8 chapter 1 . 5/5/2009
I thought the story was really good. I think you should maybe add a second chapter to it. Like she does get pregnant and 9 months later they have a beautiful baby with orange hair and brown
| LuvableLittleMonster chapter 1 . 4/7/2009
| PhantomsAngel1988 chapter 1 . 4/4/2009
| yuARELoveD chapter 1 . 3/28/2009
Sorry, I couldn't read all the way through.
a. you have some MAJOR punctuation issues.
b. BOTH characters are seriously out of character.
tohru's much more timid and shy and kyo would not say baby.
if you need help editing, email me.
| eyeSharingan chapter 1 . 3/19/2009
A couple of errors? Not from where I'm sitting!
Honey, get yourself a beta. Better still, get yourself a thesuraus and a dictionary!
Your grammar needs revising, your syntax need serious work, plots need to be better developed and your basic dialouge needs to be more involved.
You should really use correct English when composing a story. A little bit of expression/description would be lovely too.
You have the ideas. You need to execute them more appropriately.
Best of luck. I'll read your further works as I'm curious to see your progress.
| Monkeyflower03 chapter 1 . 2/24/2009
Great, a couple of errors but that is only spelling other than that Great job.