|Reviews for In The End|
| trixiefan83 chapter 22 . 11/20/2016
Your story is well written but writing the rape of a child? And yes 14 is a child. I don't know why you would enjoy writing that. It boggles my mind and is quite heartbreaking. It happens enough in real life, why put it in here? I'm honestly just curious (and heartbroken)
| Guest chapter 23 . 3/7/2014
Please use spellcheck on your work or at least use a dictionary. The stories would be easier to understand when your words are spelled correctly.
| Nyx'sReincarnation chapter 31 . 4/6/2013
Amazing amazing saga! i feel like everything that Bella went through should have more of an effect on the way she presents herself... not sure how to explain it.
There are some things that really, really bothered me about the stories. Nothing too big, but I'm just really picky about grammar/spelling.
I'll start with spelling. You should do spell check before you post chapters. I know what you post isn't professional, but it looks so much better without spelling errors. Some words you often spelled wrong: inoccent should be innocent, consquences should be consequences, and sometimes you spelled Jacob like Jaocb. There were other words misspelled as well, but they weren't recurring errors. If you don't have word or some other program that has spell check, you can find free spell checkers online. I'm not sure where though...
There's this one grammar tense... past perfect. It's a lovely tense that's sadly underused in this story. I'm not sure if you know about it... it's used in cases such as this when stories are written in the past. You use it when characters have flashbacks or when you're referring to something that happened before the current scene in the story. The perfect tense is used with the verb "to have". For example: "As she walked, she thought about the party that she HAD ATTENDED the night before."
I appologise. Other than that, I absolutely love your writing style. it's amazing how much you think into the characters, even the ones whose names are only briefly mentioned. AS far as characters go, I'd only suggest making Emmett, Rosalie and Jasper have bigger parts. Sure they have a say in family decisions, but when do they spend time with Bella? How does she know them enough to be sad when they're killed? Were the scenes just not shown? On that note, I noticed a lot of stuff missing. If you showed more bonding time between siblings, if you showed Bella's training with her shield or even mentioned it before, when things happened in the stories they would have a bigger impact on the readers.
I keep going back to the negative stuff. Anyway, I love how your OCs were incorperated into the last story so smoothly. A bunch of completely different situations all come back together in the end to make one pretty bow. That's what this story reminds me of, actually. It's like the ribbon tied around a present: it all starts at the same place on the bottom, separates and then meets again at the top in the end. Haha sorry for going kind of corny on you there. ;)
Keep up the amazing work! :) (:
| twivampsalvatore chapter 31 . 9/20/2012
| bookworm1287 chapter 19 . 12/21/2010
just to let you know...you said that the vampire bella bluished(not possible)
| bellandeannedwardfan78 chapter 31 . 12/2/2010
i love it and kinda sad a few ppl died i liked in the twilight saga but otherwise glad bella and edward are married and roxy has a mate and mel has her mom back but sad that the cullens lost there two kids and friends and some who were family to there
| Chaerinnie chapter 30 . 9/18/2010
this story was fantastic!
| Miss.CaitlinSophie chapter 30 . 8/3/2010
Wow. This series hasbeen so amazing, im sorry to see it finish x
| kkwhatkk chapter 30 . 7/2/2010
I loved In The End as much as the other 3 in the saga you created. You are the best writer of all the fan fictions I have read. :) Good luck with anything else you decide to do.
| paintedbywords chapter 30 . 2/21/2010
it was great
i feel bad the my big teddy bear emmett died though.
and rose. And JACOB :O and quil and embry :'(
i cried several times through ur series. so u
did an amazing job! - applauds and cheers and whistles-
| paintedbywords chapter 1 . 2/20/2010
i honestly love ur series. ur greeat.
| Noble Korhedron chapter 30 . 12/18/2009
WOAH! Just - WOAH! A four part saga worthy of many Viking heroes - A! :)
| ausiebound chapter 30 . 10/1/2009
you are amazing...cant wait to read it
| 16TwilightMyLife chapter 2 . 8/24/2009
| 16TwilightMyLife chapter 1 . 8/24/2009