|Reviews for Shelgr Hjarta|
| Snickerdoodle Once Removed chapter 1 . 4/29/2014
"Most characters are OOC."
Well, to begin, let's disassemble and examine what exactly constitutes a character. A character is a personality, in essence. They're each given a number of traits that make up that personality; this personality will determine how they act in a given situation. For instance, Roran loves Katrina so much he would die for her, and King Orrin doesn't know her. So, if Katrina was in danger, Orrin would be less likely to put his life on the line. This is what makes each character different; if Arya and Eragon had no real personality, you could make Arya the protagonist and it wouldn't matter, because there would be no discernable difference between the two.
So, my point is, why the fuck are you writing people OOC? That's retarded, go back and fix it. Also, your grammar is crap. Your story might be readable if it was correct. Sorry, but crap grammar crap fic. It's sloppy, lazy, and rushed.
| Naiden chapter 8 . 4/2/2014
so Arya says that she values his friendship, and hes all happy and dandy now?
| Naiden chapter 4 . 4/2/2014
why the hell was Katrina even near the battle?
And of course, this just had to be another story where Murtagh is always escaping from Eragon. Very annoying.
| Guest chapter 19 . 10/22/2013
Please write more
| Guest chapter 19 . 8/17/2013
:((((((((((NOOOOOO! I WILL RAPE YOU!
| Silverwing chapter 1 . 7/28/2012
It's Roran not Rorn
| Guest chapter 19 . 7/27/2012
Come on update!
| Guest chapter 19 . 7/23/2012
Really, it was great I really wanted Eragon to escape and get better and complete his destiny and Saphira and Arya to help him and ... so much more like kill the king and Eragon to get a horrible injury and Arya or Saphira save his life and then Eragon see's maybe Arya get hurt by the king and he gets so angry for all he has been through and loseing someone he loves that he pushes himself up of the groung still kinda dying and stabs Galbatorix throught he heart! You could have had a fantastic ending , I guess its never mind though because say you've finished with the storie...
| Guest chapter 19 . 7/10/2012
OMG! U SPELLED COURSE WRONG ITS NOT COARSE! D:
sry :) got to be a grammar nazi
| Trolllololololol chapter 8 . 3/9/2012
Hahahaha her arms rapped around her TrolllolololololHahahaha
| Guest chapter 18 . 9/6/2011
cool chapter please carry on the story
| Akiza1 chapter 19 . 6/23/2011
WTF I have been reading this storie for two days only too find out there is no end. I am sad now... You should put on the summary discontinued... It was a good storie )':
| Guest chapter 10 . 6/9/2011
| sam the man chapter 1 . 5/26/2011
This chapter made me kind of depressed.
| iakben chapter 10 . 5/4/2011
Eragon had raped his arms around his
quoted. i think you mean wrapped lmao
anyway. maybe you want to come back and tidy this story up a bit; it gets very annoying to read even though the storyline itself is good :P yes, im talking about punctuation, grammar, but especially about spelling. you know, to prevent these weird mistakes...
after i finished this story ill read your others :D cant wait
greets, the iakben