|Reviews for The World's Choice|
| Comrad Zinchkey chapter 1 . 11/14/2009
wow I love it!
| The Duchess of Telmar chapter 1 . 6/13/2009
Hey! It's good!
| ElvenSailorGirl chapter 1 . 3/2/2009
I have to say, though I like the idea of this poem, something about it doesn't work for me. I think its mostly because some of the rhymes seem and sound to me a bit forced. Also, though the repetition of this bit 'Hate and hate makes the world great,/But Valkyrie proved Hitler wrong,/The hate only brings everything to rust./What is this world we wanted all along?' is effective in a sense, it starts to feel a bit superfluous and monotonous near the end.
In fact I think, if you take that bit out in some places, it would actually help the flow of the poem. However, the rhythm is very good within the single lines. But that's just my opinion.
My twiddles with the structure aside, I do like the idea. I think the idea that you're conveying is a good one. So, good work, because I'm not about to say it's bad just because it isn't to my tastes, because that isn't true or fair. I think you've done a decent job with this.
| A.Study.In.Plum chapter 1 . 3/2/2009
its different but strangely rythmic