Reviews for everworld2 t1:the new everworld
capnnerefir chapter 1 . 4/17/2009
Well, I'm glad that at least someone is writing Everworld fics... to do this without flaming...

I'm thinking English isn't your first language because this is, quite frankly, incoherent. If I'm correct, then the best suggestion I could make would be to write in your native language; that would most likely help a lot.

In any case, I'd advise you to...well...acquaint yourself with the standard rules for punctuation, capitalization and...well, really grammar in general.