Reviews for Tropic of Virgo
edwards-debussy chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
Kisses! and Elvis! and Love!

The game of dart seduction was wonderful. Full of innuendo, want.

Edward tries to lose himself in the familiar comfort of Lauren, but that's not possible anymore, and he knows this all too well. Bella's questioning about why he never kisses her was sweet, sad, and Edward's answering kisses (complete with Twilight lines that I loved!) were his acknowledgment that he can't deny what he feels for Bella anymore, can't find it with any other woman.

Loved this update, love this story!
Sheeijan chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
Poor Bella. I wonder how much she will remember tomorrow? And Edward kissing Lauren - yeah I wonder how he'd feel seeing Bella sucking face with Jacob? Idiot. Sorry, I'm just getting a little tired of Slutward... I think I'm reading too many stories starring him lately...

Loved the darts game! Hottest darts game ever!
Reader.Megan chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
Yay! Edward admits he's in love. I thoroughly enjoyed this chapter just like I did the others. Thank you, I'm excited for the next update.

Megan.
ReDish chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
More good stuff.

No t-shirts left...now have to wear out the collared shirts.
sw4nn chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
"“Well, I don’t play Spin the Bottle, I don’t do Two Minutes in the Closet, and I don’t fuck on a bet. I’d rather pass out or puke in public that stoop to pity sex, even on my birthday. A girl’s gotta have her standards.” Bella said, firmly."

"But the tiny casual sweetness of her lips to the side of my face, that was different. That twisted up my chest and made my head spin; I wanted to pull her close and feel her heartbeat and let time stand still, and I didn’t know how to handle that."

"“I feel dirty,” said Emmett.

“I need a cigarette,” said Jasper."

I'm falling deeper and deeper in love with your characters with each passing chapter.

Thanks for the fabulous update!
BriannaMarley chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
I loved the t-shirt. Classic. I hope they figure out soon that they've been talking to each other...
AnyDaAngel chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
Hehe.. The 'Res shine' was so perfect for this chapter. Wow. It was a whirlwind of emotions - I feel as though I was on a roller coaster, and I'm begging to go again! :)

Fun! Charming! Perfect! Lovely!

and.. it doesn't matter what's on my favorite t-shirt..it's more about who's in it. ;)
saranic chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
Oh how I love this story! The darts scene was effin hot, hot, hot. Thank ya!

I loved this part “Edward,” she whispered, and her voice was small and broken, “why do you kiss everyone except me?”

“Because I’m afraid I won’t be able to stop.”

“I trust you,” she whispered.

“Then hold still,” I said, and tilted my face to hers. She shivered.

So...will he ask her to sing with him? Keeping fingers crossed.

And my fav tee says Naturally Blessed.
adoraklutz chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
Fantastic. Even better the second time around! I'm just going to go bit by bit here, or this'll be the longest review ever. ;)

I felt self-conscious and exposed and I wanted to be alone with her if she was going to look at me like that. I ran my hands through my hair, and saw that she was biting her bottom lip so hard it was white, and if she didn’t stop she was going to draw blood, so I walked the three steps to her, and rubbed my thumb over her mouth until she let go and parted her lips.

(Guh. You know what the darts do to me, bb. And then this scene? Died dead.)

“I feel dirty,” said Emmett.

“I need a cigarette,” said Jasper.

(Yeah. Ditto, boys.)

But the tiny casual sweetness of her lips to the side of my face, that was different. That twisted up my chest and made my head spin; I wanted to pull her close and feel her heartbeat and let time stand still, and I didn’t know how to handle that.

(Aww...I can't wait to see what he writes to O_G about this experience.)

“Well, I don’t play Spin the Bottle, I don’t do Two Minutes in the Closet, and I don’t fuck on a bet. I’d rather pass out or puke in public that stoop to pity sex, even on my birthday. A girl’s gotta have her standards.” Bella said, firmly.

(More reasons why I love your Bella. She actually is a "strong, independent woman" who's got a good head on her shoulders.)

that strip of bare skin between the two should have inspired indecency laws

(LOL. Isn't it funny how something innocuous can become so alluring? Oh I dunno, like DARTS. *wink*)

“I don’t remember propositioning you, Lauren; and if I had, that wouldn’t have made the least bit of difference.”..."And if a guy’s not willing to figure out the whole thing, he doesn’t deserve it.”

(Oh Edward. Sigh. You're fabulous.)

pure and light and effortless, and the range was too high to show off how rich her voice really was, but it didn’t matter, because her upper octaves didn’t get thin, just grew achingly delicate and lovely.

(I kind of feel like you're inadvertently describing this chapter here. Like I said on Rav, the tone of this chapter is lighter than the others, which I think will be crucial if - ok, when - I reread the story. After such intensity, which you're so good at writing, I'll probably need a break, but I almost feel like I'm insulting you to call this chapter light. "Achingly delicate and lovely" is really a far better way to state it.)

“Edward,” she whispered, and her voice was small and broken, “why do you kiss everyone except me?”

“Because I’m afraid I won’t be able to stop.”

“I trust you,” she whispered.

“Then hold still,” I said, and tilted my face to hers. She shivered.

(Yippee!)

“It’s one of the few things they make here that Dad approves of… as a disinfectant,”

(LOL.)

“Res’ ‘shine.”

“How much?” both men asked at once.

(Even the chiefs get it! Are we ever going to get to hear the backstory that led to Alice's earlier warning? 'Cause that would be sweet.)

The mustache twitched.

(HAHAHA! Oh man. I love Charlie.)

She climbed in, and I covered her, trying not to think, definitely not imagining getting in with her, lying close without a blanket between us.

(Yeah sure you weren't Edward. I totally believe that...)

My thoughts surged relentlessly back to what she just said: dream about you, dream about you.

(Yay! I love that she made this little slip!)

*

My favorite t-shirt is from and it says "SCIENCE: It works b*itches" on the front and has some cool data on the back. I love it, but never wear it out 'cause it makes me self-conscious. ;)
Dawn ofthe Dead chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
Dartporn
Hannai chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
Ha nearly choked when i read “Who’s the only kid in La Push who would dare?"

Lol

and bellas outfit with the forks police dept t-shirt- classic!

Umm my favourite t? A supposed to look vintage pepsi logo. it wins for being the most comfy.
Raewright chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
There is a great vibe in this story. You must know(be a) musicians.

I was really hacked when Edward messed around with Lauren. But then Bella singing for him, the bottle lid, they kissed and then Edward taking care of her. So perfect for the story.

You are weaving a great story together full of rich, realistic interpersonal interaction and detail that make it all seem real!

Awesome!
Twogoods chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
Gah! That dart game was intense. Push and pull, back and forth. I wasn't sure where you were going. I wanted her to win, but I knew in her heart that she would throw it, not wanting a kiss won on a bet. But I knew he would throw it so he would get to kiss her. The turnout was perfect. I love EPOV in anything, but I find yours particularly insightful. This line:

Especially kissing. I wanted to put my fist into the face of the guy who taught her to kiss like that, right after I thanked him

The range of emotions in that one sentence: Lust, jealousy and gratitude..simply perfect.

My favorite T-Shirt: Nirvana with the face with the X's for eyes. It holds so many memories. I've had it since high school. If a shirt could talk...
Viola Cornuta chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
From the supportstacie dot net fundraiser/meet & greet: "STARS HOLLOW * FOUNDED 1779"
stargutter chapter 11 . 4/4/2009
This is so great! I loved Bella's outfit :)
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