well that was unexpected

was a good story.

good start to the story.

I really like your story but my god is he a dumb ass still why would in the world would he tell enemy combatant his entire life story what possible reason is there to do such a thing he supposed to be a better ninja. It is frustrating when he tells his allies things but when he goes around and spout stuff off to foreign Chenobi‘s it’s just so goddamn dumb.

Dammit I was hoping he was gonna kill of Sakura I hate that bitch I get annoyed when she gets help

This definitely an interesting "Naruto gets a decent teacher early" start. I particularly like the tiger stripes thing instead of the stereotypical black. Makes things a bit more unique. (And requires less convincing for Naruto to accept it.)

what the hell is a magic sky sword they keep mentioning

sorry to see this go unfinished i liked your writing style and this was a damn good story. take it easy hope to see more from you.

Honestly the shittiest chunin exam ever written
So bad that I won’t bother reading the rest of the story

This is fucking stupid... Why not just say that Gaara attacked him? Is he not meant to defend himself? For fucks sake...

Jesus shit... punctuation, my dude. Punctuation. This is a pretty interesting story and reasonably well written, but every sentence is a run-on, and it's like you've never heard of the comma... I can't follow your dialogue, because it's all once solid flow.

For example, just looking up from this box: "To be honest he was but that's not to say that you can't get better but you're going to have to work hard and overcome your obsession with Sasuke he needs a friend more than anything."

It ought to read something like: "To be honest, he was, but that's not to say that you can't get better - but you're going to have to work hard... and overcome your obsession with Sasuke. He needs a friend more than anything."

Great job

Awesome premise and not bad language but everything kind of just runs on into each other. Makes it feel like everything is happening at the same time which just isnt believable. Too much too fast is not good.

This Naruto is worse than the one in the anime. If he was train by the old school, how come he is announcing his skill and strength to everyone he meets. Shouldnt he be more reserved about this things.

This story is just ridiculously.