/Oh, does Hinata have competition from Panda-chan?

/Well, at least they take mind-rape seriously, here.

Loved the story, but fuck you for marking it as complete. If your gunna do that atleast put abandoned in the summary. Kinda a slap in the face after i invest all that time to read a

Instead of bitching I'll just say thank you for your time and effort. It was fun while it lasted!

Please remove the complete listing or mark it as incomplete in summary. I thoroughly enjoyed the story, but was disappointed and the abrupt stop, souring the whole affair.

Thanks for giving us the outline at least

shit fic don't read

Ah...taijutsu at its best...Im seriously loving this

Hello,
I like the way you write, you have a good description/dialogue ratio and everything is clear.
Sadly your weakness is in your characterisation. For example Naruto's dialogue: Naruto speaks like a well educated scholar instead of a street smart child left to fend for himself on the education front. Try to use simpler words even if they don't feat perfectly what he is trying to say, he doesn't have a lot of vocabulary.
I stopped reading when Naruto is telling Sakura off. Two paragraphs before Naruto was thinking about hiding his capacities! Then he is doing the most cliché out of character heel face turn in public with a verbal smack down. That is jarring because of his resolution like I said but because people don't change like that either. There is habits that are hard to break, there is thinking mechanism that are subconscious and Naruto is completely out of character.
I hope that doesn't come accross as anonymous flaming, I do not have an account for you to reply to. Everything is good aside the fact your characters speak like someone write and some characterisation that is too jarring for my suspension of disbelief.
I wish you all the best,
Plume.

good story
I would have liked a more expanded ending, but I am glad you could give us the outline.
thank you for writing and posting this story.

Was really enjoying this story with 2k followers I think alot of others were to. Thank you for breaking the story meta that I'm tried of reading. I was angery when I got to this chapter but i figure you have you reason and although I'm disappointed I have to respect it. Snap summerys suck for next tim kinda makes it feel like those who read and wait for your story arnt worth you finshing it... From your summory it sounds like you could of wrapped it in a chapter or 2 and make it's for possible if unlikely continue in another story. I'm gonna subscribe to this story in the hopes you change your mind and come back to finsh it properly. Again thank you for the story.

why the hell did you abandon this story and also why did you have to be such a lazy bastard and not put it up in the description?

hmm so Uke Chan is dead rather than being a play toy for Pedo Snake I honestly thought that somehow it would be a trick performed by Pedo Snake to get Uke out of Konoha easier

seriously I'm so sick an fucking tired of authors making up that bullshit about the seal if it forced loyalty or anything like that then Sasuke wouldn't have been able to fight off Pedo Snake when he tried to take over Uke's body the ONLY thing it can do is cause pain or be used to revive Pedo Snake through his chakra and apparently a bit of his soul left in the seal.

I call bullshit on that considering that when you look at the facts sending an unstable jinchuriki into an allied nation without prior warning is damn well an act of war no matter how you want to spin it.