|Reviews for Regrets|
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 10 . 5/14/2010
Hell, if I know how I missed these chapters! I'll try to get caught back up soon. At least here's my review for this chapter. Impressive writing: "Silver platters of food and drinks were being carried around by the Hogwarts house-elves-obscured by all the refreshments they were bearing-so that they look like little roving tables." Alright, now I know that Remus and Jenn aren't exactly dating but what is up with the guy looking at the door like that? Whether or not he wanted to be there, it's not exactly like he's helping an awkward situation. Teenagers-what can you do with them or about them? I busted out laughing when I saw 'Atari Pong.' Oh, the simpler days! :) I feel like Jenn does at the end-"utterly confused by everything." But that's because of the characters-not your writing!
| bob chapter 4 . 7/19/2009
very good. i like how Malfoy isn't in the same year because he is really like 45.
| Storm2013 chapter 9 . 6/8/2009
How could you leave it there? Please please update soon!
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 9 . 5/28/2009
Jenn freaking out about the party is perfect for her character. Anybody who is as studious, fastidious, attentive to detail, etc., as her, I think, freak out about all the things that could go wrong. The same goes for her worrying about her outfit and make-up. But I wonder if every girl at least is concerned with clothes and make-up when it comes to dating-or as Jenn would probably argue, just a meeting between "friends." _ If Remus wasn't already having feelings for her, I don't think he would have said anything to her at all during their meal, esp. at the risk that the rest of the Mauraders would make fun of him. Aren't they just adorable-they really make a good couple. Good job!
| Wistful Sage chapter 6 . 5/25/2009
Drat! It was Lily ... ought to have expected it. You're not including any of the cliches people have come to expect in fanfiction these days.
And it makes for a good change. :D In retrospect, it's good she hasn't started smelling him in Amortentia already.
Yay, Sirius is asking Stephanie out! She's just the kinda girl for him. :D Pretty, smart, a little carefree ...
*lol* And it looks like Jenn's got herself two unofficial dates already. And it was great how you ended the scene between the two ... with Remus awkwardly pulling his hand away. Got me wondering if Remus would be carefree enough in his 'youthful' days to not let the werewolf thing get in the way of dating someone or if he would be wary even then.
| Wistful Sage chapter 5 . 5/25/2009
Ah .. I'm going to make this review very short, because I desperately wanna know who gets the bottle!
Wow, you're making me fall out of love with Sirius and more in love with Remus. *feels bad*
But then again, he's soo perfect isn't he? Sweet, funny, intelligent, cute ... there's only the little matter of being a werewolf.
LOL And I couldn't believe Stephanie when she said what she did. Initially I was sorta thinking that she'd be one of those generic girlfriends-of-the-female-protagonist you know, characters to be seen and appreciated in the background ... silly, giggly, falling for the best looking guy in the school ... but you're slowly adding depth to each of the characters and that's really nice. :)
Ooh, and Jenn didn't smell Remus in the love potion? lol and chess? She likes chess too? Wow, she must be slightly scary, even for a Ravenclaw.
By the way, you haven't described Jennifer's appearance yet, have you? Are you going to do it later? Or did I read it and forget? (I do that a lot too, so I wouldn't be surprised ... however I checked random previous chapters and didn't find anything :( ) I like to have descriptions of characters so that I can picture her in my head, so could you please please gimme a general idea? :)
| Wistful Sage chapter 4 . 5/25/2009
*lol* Uncommonly stupid, indeed! But who are you talking about here, Stephanie or Jennifer? :P
Aw, I think this was my favourite chapter until now. Scenes like the one between Jenn and Remus in the library make me feel all warm and fuzzy. :)
The best part is, you didn't draw out the girl's confusion too much ... it might've got boring if she just kept thinking and thinking why strange stuff was happening to her and never figured out that she had fallen for him, especially since she's otherwise a very smart girl. But I'm really looking forward to read more now! :D
Hehe, it was great how Remus got to be all chivalrous and spend time with Jenn at the same time. :D
Ooh, and is Snape a prefect? That's strangely eerie ... but I guess no one has much of a choice when picking suitable candidates from a house like Slytherin.
Ah, and I felt slightly bad for Peter too ... James and Sirius didn't respect him all that much did they? Ah ... Sirius! Poor Stephanie, I know exactly what she feels like. *lol*
Wish I was there in the story so that I could send a cool non-verbal hex her way and monopolize Sirius.
This was a really great chapter, Clare! I hope you're writing a long book. *runs off to read the next chapter*
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 8 . 5/13/2009
Well, crap, it's just Snape. Now, while I like him a lot, I don't trust teenage Snape. And for Jenn's sake, I definitely don't trust him. He's gonna do something to her and I'm afraid it involves whatever happens that involves the 'regrets' she speaks of as an adult. Again, probably my lack of memory, but what right does Snape have to warn Jenn about strolling the corridor after hours? Isn't that what he's doing while he's stalking her to threaten her? He should turn around and warn himself. I hope the best for Jenn after she makes this statement: "Despite what Stephanie had said about Remus and I practically being a couple already, the truth was that we weren't." Something obviously doesn't go right, hence the 'regrets.' But, yeah, they're practically dating and are at least going on what one could characterize as a date. I think Remus was adorable when he was asking her again to be sure she hasn't changed her mind. Can't wait for the party. I hope she at least gets to enjoy that with him. Looking forward to more. Can't wait!
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 7 . 5/13/2009
I cracked up that James was bothering Sirius about asking the best way to ask Lily. She's rather fiery, isn't she? Amazing that she and James ended up together. Jenn may have known Remus well but it's now that she's starting to see the details, such as the scar on his neck and the freckles, etc. It's as if she wants to see those things now. O, a voice in the darkness. Hope it's Remus coming to flirt with her in the dark. _
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 6 . 5/13/2009
Dang it, Lily got the potion. But I really like the reason that Jenn doesn't. Well, yeah, I don't like that Remus borrowed her knife and didn't return it in time, but she didn't seem to mind and she was too busy thinking about him anyhow. I wonder when Lily will use the potion and what will come out of that. Oh, they're going to watch the Quidditch try-outs. Mm-hm, I see something coming out of that maybe. I wonder if it's still about friendship or something else for Remus at this point. And Sirius is going to ask Steph on the Hogsmeade visit! She is going to be so happy. She'll be so high, she'll be floating over Hogwarts.
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 5 . 5/13/2009
Loved these lines: "'Besides, it's pretty much impossible not to notice how cute Remus is.' 'I haven't really paid that much attention, actually,' I half-lied. In the past twenty-four hours, Remus had suddenly become much more attractive to me." At least she's admitting that it's a half lie and that she does know that she's becoming attracted to him. I wonder if the first three potions are going to be important later. They all seem to play into what's currently going on. For instance, will Jenn be forced to admit that she's falling for Remus? Maybe part of what happens that makes her regret not being able to set right whatever happened involves an (accidental) betrayal by way of the polyjuice potion. And, lord, don't let Steph use the Amortentia on Sirius. Did you take Slughorn's line about his two perfect days from the book or create it? It's good. I would work hard to get the Felix Felicis as well. I hope Jenn gets it.
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 4 . 5/13/2009
I love how Jenn (can I call her Jenn?) gets Remus to offer to find out if Sirius likes Stephanie. That girl needs to either get with him or get over him because she's a little too strung out over him. _ I very much like how you're letting Jenn fall for Remus little by little rather than all of sudden. The little things here and there allow the reader to go on the journey with her and feel what she's feeling. Loved the line about 'you're just doing homework, it's not a date.' It might not be a date but it's definitely gonna lead to her wanting one. _ Hopefully, he's beginning to feel the same way too.
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 3 . 5/13/2009
Obviously, my memory of the books is not that great and I didn't pay that much attention to flashback details anyhow. That said, I'm either impressed with the amount of details you've put in from the book or that you've created alot of details that fit in so well in the HP world, imo, for instance Prof Vector, the arimancy assignments, and Prof Trimble and her class. I think it's very much in Jennifer's nature to think that these feelings she's having toward Remus are due to her working with a friend to get a good grade. She's a hard worker that has focused on her schoolwork in the past, so 'boys' are not exactly in the center of her radar. I like how she's been good enough friends with Remus that she knows that he alot like her and that they've gotten along so well that a romance could blossom from their friendship. While I really like Snape, I loved seeing him laughing uncontrollably. With his usual demeanor, he could use a laughing fit.
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 2 . 5/13/2009
And now the story of her regrets begins. Not a complaint but a curiosity question-the guys in the Marauders were actually known by that name when they were in school? For some reason, I had it in my head that it was a secret name for themselves or kinda became what they were called by later students. Anyhow, just curious. You've created some good characters in Jennifer's friends, making them each different but real. Also, I like how her feelings for Remus are starting to crop up. Nice way to begin it rather than her being obsessed over him like Stephanie over Sirius.
| Disco Inferno1 chapter 1 . 5/13/2009
Very nice opening prologue. You really catch a reader but making them feel Jennifer's emotions and then to throw out those lines about regret. These were great lines: "Nothing prepares you for the news of a death. Even if you've hardly spoken to the person in the last twenty years, feelings of grief, sorrow and anger still wash over you. In my case, these emotions were coupled with guilt, remorse and regret... regret that I'd left it too late to ever make things right." I like how the weather almost seemed to be mocking her. Kudos to you for breaking with the standard bad weather corresponding to a character's pain. Your writing is fantastic-I know I've said it before, but I'm very impressed with how well you're writing.