|Reviews for Vagrant|
| Dichotomous-Dragon chapter 1 . 7/22/2009
Very nice for as first Ebglish fic! Also hurrah and hugs for you for being one of only 4 or so LR fanfics that aren't slash about David and Rush (mine being another :P). This is short, sweet, and to-the-point...doesn't say alot, but that's how Jager's role went, and you were true to it!
As to constructive comments:
"Losed" would be "lost" (silly irregular cognates)
Athlun is actually spelled with an "m" on the end.
Your sentence structure is very solid, with little to no error. If you want, they could be longer sometimes, but otherwise no complaints.
Hope this is helpful!
| Devi Serene chapter 1 . 4/10/2009
Your English is good, no real need to get worried about it. I like your story, it's short but sweet.
| Elio Rog chapter 1 . 3/12/2009
Although I know nothing about Last Remnant, let me tell you that this fic was good in English, better than I do.
| Creetools o.o chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
good but... not goodness xP
lol thats ok man
continues to write
meaby u have a lace on the histori on the future xP
or meaby not lol
| shinobu-chan chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
my english is not really good so
i tell you what a think about your fic in spanish
se xk no hay nada mejor k el español y el japones xD
sta bien n.n stas empezando bien n.n solo detecte un pekeño error ortografico, pero aun asi le entendi k es lo importante xD y para k io le entienda al ingles sta canijo jajaja
sigue asi koso
suki dai io