Reviews for Vagrant
KMSaum chapter 1 . 7/22/2009
Very nice for as first Ebglish fic! Also hurrah and hugs for you for being one of only 4 or so LR fanfics that aren't slash about David and Rush (mine being another :P). This is short, sweet, and to-the-point...doesn't say alot, but that's how Jager's role went, and you were true to it!

As to constructive comments:

"Losed" would be "lost" (silly irregular cognates)

Athlun is actually spelled with an "m" on the end.

Your sentence structure is very solid, with little to no error. If you want, they could be longer sometimes, but otherwise no complaints.

Hope this is helpful!

-K
Devi Serene chapter 1 . 4/10/2009
Your English is good, no real need to get worried about it. I like your story, it's short but sweet.
saQhra chapter 1 . 3/12/2009
Although I know nothing about Last Remnant, let me tell you that this fic was good in English, better than I do.
Creetools o.o chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
m

good but... not goodness xP

lol thats ok man

continues to write

meaby u have a lace on the histori on the future xP

or meaby not lol
shinobu-chan chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
my english is not really good so

i tell you what a think about your fic in spanish

se xk no hay nada mejor k el español y el japones xD

sta bien n.n stas empezando bien n.n solo detecte un pekeño error ortografico, pero aun asi le entendi k es lo importante xD y para k io le entienda al ingles sta canijo jajaja

sigue asi koso

suki dai io

ja ne