Reviews for Seduction
deaththekidsgirl8 chapter 1 . 6/20/2012
lol i loved this story
Purple.Chocolate.Stars chapter 1 . 3/1/2010
No doubt, the best peice I've ever written. First of all, there MUST BE SEQUEL WHERE TORY DREAMS ABOUT COLIN PUTTING ICE IN HIS ASS XD (Or Colin actually doing it :O)

On this other hand, the idea was simply awesome (ice cream lube WIN) and...have I ever mentionned by kink for ice cream...down there. I don't know, everyone else writes it on the nipples, but this one was just-I am such a pervert -,-

By the way, I think I enjoyed Colin in short shorts a bit too much XD You should write slutty Colin more often ;)
Kat chapter 1 . 11/23/2009
i'm not gonna complain , i will COMPLIMENT you on the OOC-ness cuz it was sexy as hell!1 This fic made me happy :D i love the ending...especially the part with the ice-cube...kinky! I have now been inspired to write something with a cryophiliac. XD
Bandersnatch202 chapter 1 . 10/25/2009
Ahh Seduction... as I said before, this is going to be an interesting review.. Ho here goes! I have greatly mixed feelings about this story, on the one hand I love the way Colin and Tory are depicted and how it carries over into all the other fics. They are sexually craving teenage boys who are madly in love, of COURSE they are going to fuck at every and all opportunity and in every way concievable by man and some that man really is better of not questioning where they came up with it and WHAT they were smoking at the time! The only question man should be asking at that point.. is where can the get some!

*Tangent cleaver shears off that line of thought*

ANYWAYS wow that went on longer than i intended, apologies. But yes, I do love the sexy little monkey's. In all honesty though I find it SO hard to see Colin in this way, for one I highly doubt that as aroused as he was and all he STILL I don't-

*Inner Author kills the lights, a gurgling wet gasp is heard before a single lighter clicks on in the dark, lighting a cigarette in the Inner Authors teeth* Sorry.. had to be done.. bitch didn't read far enough down to get to the part that says how you don't give a rats ass about how OOC Colin was. Sorry to interrupt, he'll be a good boy now.. wont you? *gives a pat on the head to a figure in the darkness* Good.. laters.. *the lights come back on, as they do the Inner Author vanishes with the darkness and Bander can be seen pale white and sweating fearfully* Right umm anyways.. *shakes head to clear the terror*

SO Colin is a SEXY little horn dog! And he gets what he wants! Love how you made him a cryophiliac, and can't wait for you to do more with that, m ice cubes hehe. The OOCness of Colin can easily be overlooked as for one, we never really got to hear Colin's inner thoughts on the notebooks contents, so we just assume he is pissed at the end of book 2, and for two, once the two idiots finally realized their feelings for each other and the others feelings for them, there's no telling how it would alter their personalities. After all, Colin doesn't really seem like the type that gets out a lot and has tons of meaningful relationships, so what he has with Tory will be extra special. And as they are raging hormone flooded teenage boys with the hots for each other.. sex will ensue!

And once again.. poor Paul! By the end of all this he's either going to be blind or into gay porn, assuming he isn't already lol.
ckhushrenada chapter 1 . 4/26/2009
wow ...i so loved the ending to this...i could not stop laughing!
I Bought Earrings on Sale chapter 1 . 3/23/2009
The innuendo was so funny and clever. Whenever Colin said something, and picturing him in those man-shorts, you just can't help but think, "Oh no you didn't, girl-, uh, boy!".

Ice cream as lubeHAWT. But wouldn't it be sticky and very uncomfortable after a few hours?

You made Colin seemingly more shy at the end, which was quite confusing because he was seemingly confident, that's my only critique.
julia chapter 1 . 3/11/2009
HA! THAT is funny! Gross, romantic, hot and funny! Good job!
freak-joy-spastic chapter 1 . 3/10/2009
HOT DAMN! That was fucking hot as hell! (puses to go get more tissues for bloody nose) This is deffinitly going srait to my favorits. Much anime love ~bye bye~
randomness123456 chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
Hey,

First, thank you so much for reviewing my story 'A Tale of Two Kings' It really means a lot to me so I thought I'd return the favor. Forgive me for not reviewing until now but I have been dreadfully busy. Anyway, to put what I think of this story into one word: HOT! Most sincerely, this story has got to be one of the most erotic Off*Beat story I have ever read. Your description of the sex scenes were very through, and you achieved a level of blunt eroticism that I can only dream of ever incorporating into the story. To put in simply, you get straight to the point which can very well get your readers right into the story and keep them successfully hooked if the story is to continue, though I realize your probably won't. I also noticed a lack of sexual euphemisms which only strengthen your capacity as an author by not letting the blunt mention of taboo words within your writing bother you. All around your story has absolutely no flaws, one thing that I do suggest is to double check your spelling and grammar seeing as I saw a few typo mistakes as I read your piece. It is nothing to be ashamed of though, my stories are also belittled with many errors and it is through mistakes that writers learn their most valuable lessons. I hope this review of use to you. Please feel free to contact me whenever you wish about anything. All writers have their strengths and weaknesses and I am no master so please do not feel intimidated.

Thanks for the hot read and good luck writing!

mexman1993
Determined chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
“Thanks. I really need your help with more than one kind of problem, and you just can’t do a quickie over the phone and expect any kind of sticky results.”

LAWL. Oh Colin, why so s1ut~? Very hawt ficcie, the idea itself of Colin gunnin' for Tory instead was props-worthy. :)
yaoi4evandnevayuri chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
So, you just decided to go with "Seduction" as the title huh? I liked it! It was hawt! *Or should I say cool..?* Anyways, I loved the ending as well. I was wondering when Paul was going to walk in like he always does... Lol I guess this was REALLY a bad time to walk in to fill his need of starvation, then again, I guess Paul could teach them a thing or two! XD! Thanks so much for writing this!
Dgm-yoai-lover chapter 1 . 3/9/2009
that was amusing and hot /

im tryng to the get the second chap out but my beta is being slow. shell get there though