Very good! Your summary was well done; I'm always in favor of the revenge of living well. Your discription of naughty words from Mentor Snape is amusing and intriguing, and I'm always in favor of a supportive!Minerva.

I like Snape innocently(!) discovering something off in the Potter address and immediately starting to connect the dots about Harry's probable situation. The see-sawing of his responce to his hypothesis is v. realistic.

Snape's cooling down by analyzing Dumbledore's manipulations is masterful. And I really appreciate how well you seeded in Minerva's oblique intervention. I hope that is a indicator of her role throughout the story: the timely voice of support and calm.

Your portrayal of Snape beginning to see the wheels within wheels of Dumbledore's plans is strangely alluring. I can seldom see these things for myself and it's generally a shock when someone who does see these things points them out to me.

Please update again soon, I an MOST eager to see how Snape presents himself to young!Harry. And thank you for allowing us to share the pleasure of your intriguing story.

I like what you have written so far. Well thought out and Snape is not nearly so crabby. I've always wondered and I totally ignore books 6 and 7 just how much of Snape's behaviour was stirred up by Dumbles. The sterotypes he kept for over 50 years and there had to be a reason.

Great first chapter. Can't wait for the next

I'm so delighted to see a new Harry Potter story of yours! The way you depict Snape is always a treat, and I'm very much enjoying the silent debates he's having with himself already. [grin]

Welcome back. Subtly AU in various places: for instance, canonSnape would not be ruminating on what other career he might have chosen if he had money, because his reason for being at Hogwarts is as much about helping Dumbledore protect Harry as about making a living. He'd be more likely to ruminate on the difference it would have made to the choices/events that led up to feeling the need to protect Harry.

I have confidence in your skills and I'm looking forward to how you develop the story.

This looks good. Thanks for an interesting start, I like the widening of Dumbledore's lack of concern to include other children. He is a very 19th Century Headmaster.

Glad to see you finally posting this fine story!

You excellently portray a Dumbledore who adroitly straddles the line between manipulative and dotty.

I also especially enjoyed the description of Minerva and the letter-sending process. I can imagine it going just like this.

Your characterization of Hagrid is spot-on as well; biased and clueless all at once.

A fine beginning to what will be a fine story.

A great start. Thank you.

cleofine_cat

Malevolent!Dumbledore. Exactly how I've always viewed the character. And I like the internal logic of Snape - very IC. My only fear is that it will be story-as-usual - a rushed, by the numbers retelling of fan canon. You write well... but I await the plot!

Ooh, this sounds interesting! Snape-mentoring-Harry fics always have potential, and it's always even more delightful to see how a very talented writer takes it. I'm hooked! :)

A VERY interesting start. Snape can certainly help Harry avoid Dumbledore's machinations, as he as ably demonstrated in this chapter that he can well recognize them. I hope you will continue (and complete?) this story.

Ah, yes-in many ways Snape is the very last person Albus could want to see how Harry Potter _really_ lives, especially if he knows what the Dursleys are doing to the boy and wants Hogwarts to prove a contrast-the old "Lost Prince" scam. And the last thing Albus wants is an alliance between Snape and Minerva where it comes to the boy being raised like a pig to slaughter.

Looking forward to developments. (also recommend kbinz "Harry's New Home", it's very good).

Severus will be in for a surprise, I know that for sure.

I would like to see the next scene. It is very interesting

thanks for sharing

An extremely promising start!

For once there is an explanation and some backstory for why Snape would fetch Harry. Good story this far, everyone seem to be in character and I really like how Snape thinks.

First review?