|Reviews for The Cupid Job|
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/29/2015
| Happily Ever After. Again chapter 1 . 11/29/2014
Perfect. Practically a real episode! Well written, well characterized, intriguing plot, great ending, mixture of depth and fluff. Probably one of the best I've ever read.
| Random Peep chapter 1 . 8/16/2011
Lol ahh can never get enough Parker, she's just too cute. Anyways awesome job, loved it! P
| Madam Mare chapter 1 . 7/14/2011
::giggle:: Loved this!
| Mad Hatter Helsing chapter 1 . 3/1/2011
great story very well organized.
| S Robin chapter 1 . 12/30/2010
best sophie/parker fluff yet! with all the typical one liners from the cast it reads like a real episode. too bad, it would never happen like that, except in our imaginations ofcourse.
| fammy chapter 1 . 6/30/2010
| Q chapter 1 . 3/25/2010
"...stabbing the knife point down into a convenient pineapple."
A convenient pineapple.
The best phrase ever written?
It just might be!
Seriously though, I laughed so damn hard at that. So thank you for making my day that much better.
| nataliadarimini chapter 1 . 3/14/2010
I really liked this! Thank you for writing it. Femmeslash is so rare and this story is so adorable.
| Rain Addict CM chapter 1 . 2/11/2010
nicely written )
| Gumdrop Butterbee chapter 1 . 1/13/2010
Well. I'm not quite sure what to say here.
There could be several improvements (like where you sometimes used end quotes before a period), but for the most part you handled the somewhat difficult task of transferring Leverage to literature fairly well. I know how taxing it can be to get the same, classic feel when it comes to a show like Leverage, which relies on many subtle visual cues that wouldn't be nearly as subtle in literature.
You made a wise decision, going with making it obvious to us instead of telling us all about it afterward (which likely would have come across as contrived, forced or otherwise painful), and yet you still managed to make your audience smile as they would with the show. I must admit I was a little concerned as to how you would pull it all off, but you did admirably well when it came to the setup and how it was done.
As far as characterization, while for the most part you got it right here as well, I have to say that a few moments felt a little bit forced. Particularly, the fact that Parker, out of nowhere, started acting like a horny lesbian (asking for copies of porn, for example) when she hadn't done as much in the show.
I'll give you the benefit of the doubt, since it could be said that she was hiding that from them, as well (understandably so) and after hooking up with Sophie no longer felt the need. This is much easier to allow being that as I said, you handled the characterization well and it was still well within her character to act that way (albeit with a little creative thinking). Aloof, awkward, blunt, and an endless mine of comedy gold that fortunately is not played up often enough to lose its value.
This brings me to another topic: the religion throw in. It's very, VERY risky to do something like that since it almost always becomes a question of who's right and who's wrong. Who's going to concede to whom? However, despite the fact that I actually cringed when that came up, this was not entirely out of character and you brushed over the issue well enough for the more serious implications to be easily ignored.
I liked the bit of self humor you threw in with the Kim PossiblexShego joke, and though it bordered on forced it probably would have been hard to work right anyway, so I commend the skip around. I also had to laugh every time I saw a Leverage Stock Phrase, such as "Let's steal an x," "It's a very distinctive x," or Alec's various and prideful geek comments - such as here, where he said "Power to the geek."
The throw in with Parker's foster father was not necessary, since you could have just left it at her ACTUAL backstory (as little as we have right now, anyway) and it would have worked fine. Unless I somehow missed an episode with that exact plot as to her past. I'm personally tired of everyone and their mother thinking that a female character has to have been sexually abused to be dramatic. I am fairly certain that having no parents and being shuffled around families and houses all the time is bad ENOUGH. Hell, just having an unhappy family is plenty.
...though, I did smile at the bit about blowing up the house with him in it as payback. Justice can come in small packages, apparently.
Now, I could be wrong, and this next bit may be a bit reliant upon opinion, but... these people make millions on every job, and their very first job's final payment (after getting back on track, anyway) was described as "buy an island and retire." Considering that they quite likely could have made a million or two on each solo job beforehand, that is a LOT.
So...uh... maybe the ten bucks for a bet was more of an, "I'm still used to having to have a normal job to scrape buy" sort of friendly thing. Or maybe ten bucks in cash is just a little bit easier to transfer than a hundred. But... if I were them, man, a hundred it would be.
On that note... I'm not sure what kind of strip club you meant to imply that this was, but in a decent one, you can throw away four hundred bucks on a stripper ALONE. Easily. Especially if there are bottles of champagne that are worth a hundred. It would have made a bit more sense for him to start off with an offer of five hundred, especially since he was willing to blow an extra hundred on some champagne (even though he was just trying to drug her with it).
Anyway, I guess I'll wrap it up with this: this was very humorous in many places, and that definitely helped carry it where it otherwise might not have worked. Though you mostly had a good grasp on the characters it sometimes felt like you were using them for a mouthpiece or something to that effect; they faltered in a few places, threatening to fall flat. However, you usually brought them back before they could go through with these threats, so kudos there.
Your intro was very solid, but there was a slight bit of drag to the piece as a whole (though to be fair that might be because I haven't slept in ...I can't remember how long, actually) and the writing was average ... possibly slightly above it, I don't know, I'd have to read it all again and I'm FAR too tired for that.
The creativity and ability is most likely there, for certain, but your style seems a little bit lacking sometimes and I feel that you should work on it a tad more. (Try some speculative work?) On the bright side, I can't recall any glaring errors (aside from what I mentioned all the way at the beginning of this ludicrously long review), so I can't call you out there.
Listing any of the moments that made me smile, or chuckle, or downright laugh? That would take a ridiculously long amount of time. Like I said, there was a lot of humor here, which I really, really enjoyed seeing. I can't recall a single moment where I found something more annoying than amusing, and that is INCREDIBLY rare.
Even the cliched, wrapped-up-a-bit-too-quickly ending got me to smile. Quite possibly the best cliched ending I've seen lately.
I really do want to say more to compliment you, but try as I might I can't seem to recall some of the things I wanted to say. Terribly sorry about that. I didn't mean for this review to be so... dreary.
(OH! One thing I wanted to say was that again, I DID enjoy your final setup. Sophie is quite the actress when she's "breaking the law," isn't she? You showed that very well.)
Anyway (I keep using that word...), commendable job through and through, especially given the length (with no shortage of content, by the way), but I wouldn't quite go so far as to call it amazing. Still, I liked it, and it was a very nice read for being the first Leverage fanfic I've checked out.
P.S.- Sophie/Parker is hot.
(Holy wow, have I really used up 6k characters already?)
| Meatball42 chapter 1 . 7/5/2009
I don't usually like the femslash fics, but I'm not a prude, so I read them anyway. This story was awesome! I loved how Nate was completely freaked out by the very idea! And Eliot and Hardison acted much better than I expected they would, but still so in character! The job was great, and the end was hilarious! Busted! You wrote Parker really well, which is very tough, and Sophie was just as caring and sensitive to others' feelings as she is on the show. I also loved the 'very disctinctive' joke from the show; well placed!
All in all, a very well-written story. I'm adding this to my favorites list. Thanks for a great fic!
| go-sullivan chapter 1 . 6/23/2009
Sweet. I love this.
| WannaBeRogue chapter 1 . 6/6/2009
You've really managed to capture the voices of the characters. While I enjoyed reading this entire story, my favorite part of all was this:
"Parker shook her head in confusion. What was Peggy talking about? Parker was having lasagna, not tacos."
I laughed so hard! Fantastic!
| Kay8abc chapter 1 . 4/25/2009
This is very funny, I loved it. You really captured Nate.
Nate Alcoholic Beverage. I love the line, "She’s Parker. The amazing thing is when she bothers to use a door.”.