|Reviews for This Is Me|
| Your Lucky Star chapter 1 . 7/14/2009
Eh... it has potential to be a really good story. I recomend you continue... but maybe with more punctuation, and ya like the two other reviewers said you need to say who's talking.
But besides that it was overall pretty good.
| Sexyrockbabe234 chapter 1 . 4/28/2009
I liked it. This story has great potential. Um, you need to say who's talking, and you need puncuation, but the story is good, and people who have perfect puncuation aren't always creative, so I think that the story comes first, THEN worry about grammar, so, yeah, this story is great.
Keep writing. :)
| Mari xx chapter 1 . 3/25/2009
i think this story has promise.
Since you're new to , and I know how that feels, I'll give you some advice.
(Remember, this is constructive criticism. Not a flame.)
Try not to put spaces in between the quotes. they should be directly in the beginning and end of the sentences.
Every time your character talks, there needs to be some action or something to let the read know whos talking. Not all the time, though. Just enough. A balance.
Every sentence needs an ending according to the sentence. A period, or an exclamation point, or a question mark, or a dash for interruptions. Even if the sentence has quotes, the puncuation needs to be there, inside the quotes.
I think this story could be amazing. Keep writing. :)