Reviews for Holly Evans and the Spiral Path
onlytoask chapter 24 . 6/10
I'm very excited for Tonks' entrance into the story. I was was surprised by the events of this chapter but am ultimately pleased with them. The more immoral Holly acts, the more interesting I find her. Plus, I don't actually like Hermione all that much. She's kind of bland, all things considered.
onlytoask chapter 18 . 6/9
Well, I think that's about it for tonight. 16 chapters seems enough. This was actually even more interesting then I thought it would be and I find that I don't actually care about the spoiler much at all.
Mangahero18 chapter 36 . 3/25
Fuck Dumbledoor! He was just as sinister in the books in retrospect. Just what you would expect from a guy who trekked with a possible ally of Hitlers in his younger days (Grindelwald)
Mangahero18 chapter 35 . 3/25
Fuck Vernon!
Mangahero18 chapter 22 . 3/25
and the pin drops
Mangahero18 chapter 15 . 3/24
Im loving Holly more and more
Mangahero18 chapter 9 . 3/24
The buildup to Holly's eventual 'Darkness' is truly slow going.
Mangahero18 chapter 7 . 3/24
Hehe. I liek Tacos!
Isa Lumitus chapter 50 . 3/13
Words cannot describe how much I hate Dumbledore, across almost all fanfics and canon. Actually, words might manage it... There's an idea I've been playing with for an AU where Prof Dumb died fighting Grindlewald. The main character is a Tom Riddle, who grew into a decent human being and an accomplished wizard. He gets dropped in canon-verse. Plot is him trying to figure out what needs to change to 'fix' the world he's in.

Have you read the Darkwar Trilogy, by Glen Cook? I realize full well that you can't answer me, but I do wonder. I liked it, but it's rather dark. I found the main character very easy to identify with. Given the tone of my comments, you can probably guess how that went.

Also, Holly totally should have done the three step plan on the three Slytherins in the last scene. Even if the authorities figure out what she did, that would only further her reputation.
Isa Lumitus chapter 49 . 3/12
Okay. I like your first appearance for Voldemort. Pretty good 'Oh Shit' moment, and I like seeing people have their faces rubbed in bad decisions they've made.

Looks like Holly Harry Lily is no longer a power he knows not.
Isa Lumitus chapter 48 . 3/12
Before the pregnancy was mentioned, I was thinking that my own suggestions for Holly qualified as the DEATH choice. And I noted the line: Deal death, die. Now I expect things to go rather... differently.
Isa Lumitus chapter 47 . 3/12
I can't help but think that Holly should have killed the minister as soon Bones said that she was legally allowed to do so. Given his past behavior, he's going to keep trying to destroy Holly until he dies, or she gets unlucky.

I put good odds on her ability to pull it off. Between him being weak, and Holly having the initiative, she'd just have to be quick about it.
Isa Lumitus chapter 45 . 3/12
I'm starting to think that Holly isn't the only one too free with the memory charms. Watching a classmate get hideously injured serves as a valuable lesson. It teaches: Don't piss that person off. It also teaches: This could happen to you if you provoke people.

By obliviating them, you steal that learning experience. Imagine for a moment if the Dursleys were allowed to remember what Holly did to them, and that they only lived because other mages stepped in. Vernon would not have been stupid enough to kill Hedwig. He might have tried to kill Holly directly... But she probably would live through that and justifiably kill him in retaliation.

Instead, some of the most important lessons in How-to-not-get-killed are stolen, and people keep making the same mistakes.

Also, sounds like Draco needs to be fixed via the three step plan.
Isa Lumitus chapter 43 . 3/12
Of all the morally questionable things that Holly has done, there's only one thing that actually bugs me. That would be that she's a bit too free with memory charms on people that trust her. She uses them like the Imperious Curse.

The homunculus? Well, I'd be lying if I said I wouldn't feel guilty in her shoes for doing that. But I actually don't hold that against her, regardless of whether she felt guilty. I guess that's the difference between intellect and emotion. Intellectually, I feel she did no wrong. Emotionally? It's kind of sickening that she created a life of suffering, and then snuffed it when it outlived its usefulness.
Isa Lumitus chapter 40 . 3/12
First off, I totally called that both Harry and Holly would have to compete. Also, I wonder what the odds are that I'll find Princess of the Blacks in your favorites?

Second: Ugh. Religion. You had plenty of foreshadowing that Hermione was christian, though. And seeing her get worked up about something other than SPEW is a welcome deviation from most fics. Originality is good.

Last, while I have no real problem with text-wall chapters... I tend to forget things that I wanted to say in the comments.
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