|Reviews for Holly Evans and the Spiral Path|
| DylanL chapter 50 . 3/5
Now that I have finally finished the whole story (not the sequel though) I can say that it is by far one of the best stories I have read here.
I wonder though where u will find a new Arthur Pendragon, on a related note it would have been funnier if she had made the sword look like Excaliber before sticking it into the 'stone'.
I was kinda hoping newt would have fulfilled the star prophecy that Firenze was talking about so that she wouldn't lose her child but I had forgotten all about the visions from Luna.
The tangents were also good but r u going to do them for the sequel and for that matter is the last section here written somewhere BC it has a journal titling to it.
| DylanL chapter 47 . 3/4
Wow u just have a way of putting in the most shocking things. I mean who wold have guess that poppy is floreans wife. But know I want to know wat she did on valentines day and where is Talia. I'm sure the latter will b answered soon along with (hopefully) wat secrets poppy was talking about. U have me even more intrigued
| DylanL chapter 43 . 3/3
Interesting that holly was able to lie to minervra in the journal. I assume when she was messing with the enchantments to make it two way she got rid of the need to only post the truth, if u said that and I forgot then I'm sorry for even bothering to post this review.
| DylanL chapter 40 . 3/2
I liked how holly hands led the Slytherins but how did she get out of the original vow without make a new super ceded vow. Also I forgot to mention this before but I loved the inclusion of the classic McCoy line when tonks was playing him.
| DylanL chapter 35 . 3/2
Wow. I know I've said it before but I did not see that coming. Though y was holly acting like she was. I mean y didn't she stay in her room and open the window for hedwig. Also was hermiones letter important and did Hedwig count for the prediction about losing a close female.
| DylanL chapter 32 . 3/1
I loved that omake it was some of the funniest stuff in this story. I hope u don't take that comment the wrong way.
| DylanL chapter 22 . 2/27
I definitely didn't see that coming and I am also sad for holly, now she doesn't have any family left except the durleys and who would want them as family anyways
| DylanL chapter 16 . 2/26
Very interesting ice cream, I actually would like to try it based on ur description. Too bad I won't be able to get to Minnesota any time soon. Also I thought the analogy was very good
| DylanL chapter 13 . 2/26
Wow I did not see that ending coming. She will need even more serious cheering up than when she was obliviated after that, but the inconstant cramps had led me to think it sounded more like contractions than menses. I can't wait to see wat hatches and I am looking forward to more uses of ideas from sword of gryffindor
| DylanL chapter 8 . 2/26
Lol that last section was great and if the side story for Holly's exploits is as good I think u might want to try ur hand at some PWP on a site like adult-fanfiction . Org . But seriously those last few sentences especially when holly realizes that the quill is still on were hilarious
| DylanL chapter 7 . 2/26
I want to point out that if u were going for some canon realism concerning dates and such then myrtle wouldn't have been killed until sometime between 1943-1947. BC if memory serves me right riddle didn't get to Hogwarts until 39 or 40 then to 5 years to locate the camber and create the diary. Now that said it was 50 years since being opened last so it would have been the 42-43 School year if taken literally instead of going off riddle history. Either way I was compelled to point that out even though it is very minor so I don't expect u to change it or even botherwith this review beyond reading it. Also if u already realized everything I said and made 30’s intentionally and it will be explained later on that's fine but if it won't be explained and it WS intentional could u reply explaining. As I said it is minor so if u don't want to that's fine by me I will continue to think it was a mistake
| DylanL chapter 1 . 2/26
Hi just want to say so far this is quite an interesting story and I can't wait to see how it develops, however I have a couple questions already. The most pressing I guess is, is this series still being worked on or not. The next most pressing is concerning the storyline, Holly would have been born in September of 79 so she would have been about 9 months older than dudley and while I know when I went to school for kindergarten it was almost a year after I turned 5 BC my birthday is in september so I could see how dudley and her would have gone to primary together if the UK has similar system for start datez but holly should have been made aware of magic at almost the same time as Hermione which was almost a year before she started hogwarts , I guess my question is based on wat I understood about the timeline she wasn't told until a month before the start of term, y. The next question is, is holly snapes illegitimate daughter or is she actually Harry's full sister and was hidden to protect her from being a target for voldemort and others. If she is james ' kid then whose idea was it to desperate them and hide her existence. Also where's harry and y isn't he at Hogwarts with her. I guess some of those might be answered in the story so I should just read on, but if u could plz answer my first question as I would like to know if there is a chance of having the story finished ever
| Andrius chapter 22 . 2/18
Oooh. Shit hits the fan, huh?
| Andrius chapter 16 . 2/14
Probably the most interesting Florean I've ever read. Well done.
| Doombug chapter 5 . 1/26
sadly I'm starting to think that if this was just a normal story it would be much much better, these "journal entries" don't really have any substance/action/or contain any real interest for me sadly