Reviews for Holly Evans and the Spiral Path
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 19 . 6/12/2009
Entertaining chapter, thanks.
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 16 . 6/11/2009
Thesaurus abuse: Glace is not ice cream is not "glace".

"Fruit in their ice cream"?
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 15 . 6/11/2009
Nice tearing into Marge! Sounds well practiced; you must be oh so much fun at Thanksgiving. ;-)

However, the Dursley's don't have patio doors that can admit a 3 meter ballooned-up person. Heck, their *garage* door(s) are too small for that.

This is turned out to be a fun story - even if you seem to have an obsession with sexual assaults.
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 14 . 6/11/2009
Ah the old "Harry mutates into something super" gag. Only this time with gynecological details! Joy.

Imagine the teasing when it gets out that Holly needs dragon-hide tampons. *Must go barf now*.
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 12 . 6/11/2009
Nice. Well played in the Chamber of Fun.
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 10 . 6/11/2009
How does McGonagall know that Holly hasn't been using her journal? Or that she's studying Occlumency?

"flame-haired trollop" :)

Disgusting bit about the "Vital humour" but it hardly seems likely that, in a school full of Syltherins and Weasley twins, no student had checked the food and drink before.
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 9 . 6/11/2009
" don't... fancy her do you?" I immediately heaved out my breakfast on the floor.

HOOT! :)
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 8 . 6/11/2009
Well that was different. You need to change this story's rating to M - due to the rape and the *child pornography* scenes.

The transcript thing would be mildly amusing if Harry actually existed in your fic. Too many things don't add up vis-a-vis Harry and Holly, however.

Given the spells available to them, wizards must do a fair amount of rape (most young men would if they could do it without struggles, traces, or angry victims).

However, witches would surely have developed more reliable countermeasures - beyond hoping that they could eventually retaliate. It is muggle girls who would be the main targets of a little "charm and charm". This has always seemed like a much more likely source of muggleborns than the same genetic mutation occuring independently and with notable frequency.
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 5 . 6/10/2009
Well some of that was weird, but *finally* somebody had the good sense to use the bookstore brawl as cover to wallop Draco! I don't think I've seen that in fanfic before; it's about time. :)
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 3 . 6/9/2009
Ok, *now* we start to see some possibly interesting changes.
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 2 . 6/9/2009
So far this story is just a lame summary of canon, but with an added OC that is neither explained nor apparently relevant to the plot points.
SomeGuyFawkes chapter 1 . 6/9/2009
Story start has potential.
KJS X-OVER chapter 20 . 6/5/2009
If I had to write every thing I like about this story, I would just copy and paste it here! But I won't. ;) Newt is adorable! And calling Holly mum sque! The whole patronus thing was hilarious, although Holly's speech about why she loves Hermione brought tears to my eyes by how lovely it was! Sigh... This whole fic is wonderful, even the darker aspects.
Tarrin chapter 20 . 6/5/2009
This is such an excellent story. I just found it and read it completly in one day. Kep up the good work, Eagerly wating for the next update.
Meteoricshipyards chapter 20 . 6/5/2009
Hm, I was starting to wonder if, with her caustic fluids, Holly would ever be on the receiving end of an orgasm.

So, where did she learn the pain curse? Pseudo-Moody didn't demonstrate that until 4th year.

DD isn't listening; he should, at least, realize that Holly isn't accepting his arguments and is smarter than his reasoning that he gives her. But then again, this is Dumbles.

Thanks for the story. Always read your story as soon as I can.

Tom A.
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