|Reviews for Leader of the Pack|
| Guest chapter 13 . 5/11
Oh God...it's so cute.. Think kiba as a player makes me shudder :D
| mslegend92 chapter 13 . 7/11/2014
never thought I would enjoy a story of such an odd couple in my mind. you really did well and you pulled of their while at it which is rare to see but well done and keep on writing.
| FreeGhostLife430 chapter 13 . 8/29/2012
This may be a lil late to say because I only started an account a month ago but I'd like to say that this was such a good story and I really liked it. Thank you and keep up the good work! (:
| LM3795 chapter 13 . 9/20/2010
Very cute fic! Great job! :)
| Sophia chapter 13 . 7/6/2010
Just loved the whole story, i'm sooooooooo glad i read it. the kiba x ino couple iz reali gud n i fink dey mke a gud couple. u have good story telling style. hope 2 c mre work of urs. xxxx
| kibababe7015 chapter 13 . 1/28/2010
loved theres nothin like a good story :) keep up the good work
| Shenhui chapter 13 . 1/17/2010
*squeal* this is such a good InoKiba story.. do write some more.. this couple is steadily rising up in my fave non canon couple list.. )
| Isolating chapter 13 . 8/20/2009
OO OMG! LOVE IT!
DD InoX kiba!
| vampgirl09 chapter 13 . 7/23/2009
YAY! a great ending to a great story!
| Perentie Fan chapter 13 . 7/18/2009
Gotta say the ending felt rushed to me. And the six month coma especially seemed to come out of nowhere and seemed unnecessary. It also seemed unrealistic given the Leaf is home to possibly the greatest healers on the planet, a woman who was able to break two men out of Tsukyomi induced comas in seconds and healed Naruto when even Kyuubi couldn't, plus another who developed an antidote to an incredibly complex poison before her patient died.
It also seems unlikely Sakura would be allowed to just leave on a solo mission after all that. The lack of Ino worrying over her was odd too. Of course one might assume some of this occurring off screen but it still felt like everything happened too fast and that there was a needlessly long period where nothing happened.
Inoichi's consistently pathetic and out-of-touch state also seemed a far cry from the competent jonin of the series. That his friends and former teammates didn't seem to help him seemed off as well.
Basically the story felt like to me it devolved from a nice young romance to suddenly Ino and Kiba having a family. There wasn't enough in-between stuff for me, but that's just my opinion. I really liked a lot of the earlier chapters.
| WwhiptailwW chapter 13 . 7/13/2009
Really, really good :) I really enjoyed reading it!
And Ryouken? A hound , am I right? ;)
| Odhora chapter 13 . 7/13/2009
Well, it's always nice to see happy endings! The Ino's pregnancy part was kinda...cliche but the ending was really wonderful. Good to see Inoichi finally accepted Kiba, never liked him as an antagonist!
Liked Shino's ending as well. He should end up with someone older imo. None can deny he is too matured for his age in a sense.
Just one random thought, if the kid possesses only one ability...then the other side may not like that much. I would hate to see the kid's conditions, being disliked by grandpa for acting like a puppy and not being able to shoot his mind or...you get the point. I am not sure if possessing both at the same time is possible at all...or we would see 'hybrid' nins in the canon already. If he has both then he may just be treated like a jinchuriki by the village...a precious weapon to fear and to use. But those questions can be left unanswered!
About Sakura's ending, well for some reason I had a feeling you would do that.
Anyway, it has been fun! Write more soon! Perhaps stories with more team interactions if possible! Thanks.
| Willow chapter 13 . 7/12/2009
Aw, that was such a nice ending! Great job! Will there be a sequel? Maybe something set a few years in the future?
| Jan Lee chapter 13 . 7/12/2009
Aw...what a great ending to a great story. I like how Inoichi finally came around...and I was truly concerned about Kiba's being in a coma! I had reread that part a couple times to believe it finally. Anyway, it's good that a new generation is born...the cycle of fire, etc. etc. Thanks for sharing your creativity!
| Odhora chapter 12 . 6/27/2009
well, I somehow never thought it would be Shino. Neither did I expect the story to get so serious suddenly. Kiba just did what was natural for him though it may sound kinda drastic but... that's him. Shika and Chouji were fine too. I like it when they act in a 'elder brotherly' way with Ino's BFs.
The fight was okay. I think a fight is almost always okay when the opponents have a personal/emotional issue between them.(like Sasuke-Itachi, Naruto-pain) or there is a good aura of suspense in it(like almost all fights in Naruto). This fight had both. Oh, I kinda correctly anticipated the aftermath of the fight.
Hope Kiba gets better soon. Wonder if Ino can take this news without fainting. That is one cliffhanger situation.
Just two random thoughts, how is Ino so well suited for Aburame clan? And couldn't Kiba smell Ino inside her house?
BTW, 'He definitely didn’t fit the image of the boy you take home to meet your father' about this line. It's kinda...troublesome. Can you please write 'a girl' instead of 'you' in it? Thanks! Update soon.