Reviews for Second Place
Hi chapter 1 . 11/13/2011
That was
SlashMyDreams chapter 1 . 11/2/2010
I cannot speak much for iambic pentameter, but this flows beautifully, and in a style reminiscent of Shakespeare. Very lovely.
Edna Pests chapter 1 . 9/17/2010
Well done! Oberon and Ms. Puck forever!
Greenleaf's Daughter chapter 1 . 3/16/2009
First of all: This is cleary not a "pathetic attempt to write in iambic pentameters"! Don't underestimate your skills please! You have really managed to capture the flow of the words, especially after getting over the hurdle of the first two or three lines but then it's perfect. And leaves me wondering if there's another chapter following. Either in poetry form or prosa (since you managed to evoke the feeling that -notwithstanding the 'cruel trick'- there's definitely more to their story than meets the eye). Assuming I got it right and you're implying Oberon/Puck here. Either with slash or not. Anyway, I just love those two. :P

The only thing which struck me was the bit in your introductory sentence "It hurts Puck to see them happy together, but for the greater good of the world she has to let him go." Who is 'she' (presumably Titania)? Who is 'him' (presumably Oberon)? Why does she have to let him go for the world's greater good? Will Puck wreck havroc on the world if she doesn't? What would that scenario mean for Oberon then?