Reviews for Onions
MechaMasha chapter 1 . 6/16/2013
Cute, but very choppy. You also seem to have a bit of trouble getting into Kisshu's mind-set, which is unsurprising -most people do. That said, it was not all that bad. If you ever feel like revising this story, or would like further feedback, please, feel free to contact me.
CelticLily chapter 1 . 10/16/2011
I know what you mean about not getting reviews -_- I've had like 60 readers and only about 5 of them have reviewed :(

Anyway this was funny XD Especially the last line! If Pai knew what Kish was thinking, he'd probably cry from exasperation anyway :D
KishxIchigo4eva chapter 1 . 6/28/2010
flametonguehiss chapter 1 . 12/12/2009
If Pai can shed tears and feel pain, can he kill? I see a disasterous outcome. Good job.
Bishie Huntress chapter 1 . 11/21/2009
LOL Kisshu's hilarious! I like your portrayal of him, as well as his "missions". D I also like your descriptiveness. You paint a clear picture without too many words. (I like words, but I really like how you did it. Hehe...)


True Colours chapter 1 . 10/20/2009
Lol, I like the little line at the end.

This was melodramatic, and kind of a mish-mash of starts out all 'swirling black hole,' then morphs into light humour with occasional forrays into 'his voice was a knife stabbing my Was it deliberate? I don't really see Pai saying the word 'fuck' - too emotionless - but I liked the line: 'it makes you seem weak.' I can just imagine kish deliberately taking this cliched line and using it...

Spiritcharm chapter 1 . 5/30/2009
It was okay. We never really seen Pai cry before. I wounder what Kish will try next.(Mental images)


I feel sorry for Pai
Mint Pearl Voice chapter 1 . 3/17/2009
This is hilarious. Will there be more chapters, or is this just a oneshot? I hope there's going to be more!
Rizu Neko-Chan chapter 1 . 3/16/2009
Hahaha, that was brilliant! xD Completely in character for Kisshu and Pai the entire time! Props for the last line too! It made the whole fic!

Seriously, I envy your talent of being able to alternate between depressing, emotional fics and screaming hilarious ones so easily. You work great in both geners.

Excellent work!

WingedSmasher chapter 1 . 3/16/2009
Kisshu good luck with that hypothesis!
easternrose21 chapter 1 . 3/16/2009
Ooh poor Pai-kun, onions make me cry too DX Lol, you should do a sequal Saba-chan, about Kisshu's next mission XD