Reviews for sanctuary
xxaloxx chapter 8 . 5/12/2009
not much to change but your grammer
xxaloxx chapter 7 . 5/12/2009
okay first off you should describe everything a little bit more detailed by everything i mean the memories wat did evdward see and everything he noticed about those memories
raeb2008 chapter 7 . 5/8/2009
wow...LOVED the flashback to gave a sense of their relationship,not just the typical school crush, (i.e. ron n lavender).It had all the components of real love- passion, tenderness, humor,etc...kudos to you,especially for your 1st run!by the way,love the irony of having both Edward AND Cedric in the same story(from the movies standpoint)it forces a totally different visual!Also,liked how the memory helped her to get through the day & at the sametime shows her strength & sense of self coming back to her,painful as that may chapter again!Id like to see the Cullens curiosity get the better of them!Can u imagine the look on Edwards face if he had started spying on her(like hed done in the past w/ Bella)& maybe Alice tags along(cuz we know alice can't stand not being able to 'see' for those blocks of time) & they both witness Melody or even Frank,using the floo network maybe?w/a flash disappearing right before their good vampire eyes!you could make it go in so many the humerous side the shock of it would be priceless w/the expressions on their faces, it could totally freak them out& wonder who this girl really is & get them fired up to find out more anyway they can? maybe even trying to follow or talking her into revealing more somehow? Also with her not eating hardly or sleeping she might get ill while franks away and who would have to treat her?yep, Dr. Cullen of course! you asked for input :), not really'story' lines but fun ideas you may want to toss around!can't wait for the next chapter!
xxaloxx chapter 7 . 5/7/2009
wow this were like wow it was an awesome experience tell me when the next chapter comes out and u will read ot it could only get better if somethings that were weakly detailed get describes more and thats it - xxaloxx
xxaloxx chapter 2 . 5/6/2009
yo that was grate check your hotmail for more
raeb2008 chapter 6 . 5/6/2009
Im REALLY enjoying the integration of my 2 favorite sagas in your story.I like how your showing both vulnerability & strength with her, my only 'critique'to offer is she cries a lot,having gone thru grief/survivors guilt,sometimes a person gets to the point that there just aren't ANY tears curious&impatient for what each new chapter will bring!How the two worlds interact&playout.I like how you've worked existing storylines into your own,making it fresh& unique.I wonder how the wizarding world would take to meeting the cullens on their own turf so to speak,hogwarts or even the ministry of magic to lend a helping hand to the twins? hmm...Guess I'll just have to be patient to see where you take us! Keep up the great work!
Emma99 chapter 2 . 4/28/2009
PLEASE, IF YOU'RE WRITING HARRY POTTER STUFF, PUT IT INTO HARRY POTTER, NOT TWILIGHT
HarryPotter009 chapter 4 . 4/23/2009
really good. more please!
roswell lover11 chapter 2 . 4/15/2009
hi

poat more soon

keep up the good work

poor melody.

i hope she find happiness.
roswell lover11 chapter 1 . 4/15/2009
hi

keep up the good work

great work
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