|Reviews for Repentance|
| Bethany C. MacKenzie chapter 1 . 5/11/2009
I like how most of the sentences here are short, the three to five words long kind of short; somehow, instead of feeling choppy, it gives the story a more. . .I don't know how to say it. . .better pacing? The words you used were sharp (ish? XD) and to the point, never beating around the bush or having unnecessarily long-winded details. Even though I've never even heard of this fandom before (you can shoot me now :D), the emotions that seep through your words are very real and deep. Great job!
| Qzil chapter 1 . 3/21/2009
Nice show of emotion, Silver.