I knew it!

Omg! I love it!

Oooooh yeah, I also forgot arrogant when describing Edward. It's also kind strange that he's a little rough with Bella in bed. I can't recall any particulars right now, just an overall feeling that he shouldn't be with her like that given her history and current mental state.

It isn't often that I don't want E and B to end up together with their happily ever after, but in this case, I'm really hoping she leaves him behind and finds her own way in life. There's something not right with him...

I can't take it anymore, I've got to say something. Let me start by saying that I am enjoying the basic plot of your fic and, my God, you wrote what is basically a book! I have so much respect for anyone that has the talent to do such a thing and the gumption to actually finish what they started. That said, this is your story and you can write it in absolutely any way you want.

My personal opinion, however, is that Bella's friends are really not that great for her. Alice is too pushy, or at the very least, pushes at the most ridiculous times. Also, Edward has some serious issues (which I know are part of the story). The whole PI thing, when Bella finds out, I hope she tears him a new one, then leaves his lying ass. He's obsessive, hypocritical, a compulsive liar (about MANY things), and just comes off as kinda sleazy. I loathe that whenever he's in hot water he "distracts" her with sex. And on that note, I, for one, find lemons too prevalent in fics, having one in every chapter bores me. That's okay though, I know how to skip ahead. What I can't get behind is how in this story the timing is absolutely dreadful! In this chapter here, she just told him about the sadistic bastard that killed her mom just before she unloaded a clip into his chest, and then they're like, 'Okay...well, let's fuck now.' They had sex after Edward blundered at the Rose and Emmett diner. Guys are horny, but that doesn't mean they hug someone after those types of emotions and get hard. Speaking of which, reading between the lines makes me think that Rose is also aware that this is the same Bella whose case disturbed Em so much, yet she was a total bitch! Asking her those majorly probing questions just to see if she's good enough for Edward. Edward is a big boy, how about you let him decide if she's worthy.

Okay, I think I got it all out of my system. I didn't say this to make you upset, and I hope you don't think I'm too awful. You really are a good writer and story teller, you just happen to have hit on a lot of my of Twific pet peeves.

"I fixed my gaze on a tattered poster of Jesus standing in the backlit doorway to heaven, beckoning in his flock with that sad, innocent face. I snorted softly. Sheep. That's what we all are. Fucking sheep."

...and I was really enjoying your story up until then.

I really liked this story. I'm usually not into the whole Angst, but you did a wonderful job. You're on my favorites :D

Can't wait for more.

-CullenLove223

Really great! Thanks for sharing!

love the story

This seems to be an interesting story. Can't wait to read more.

I thought I had started this months go, but guess not. Interested to see where this is going.

Aww... so how old is Renee? And it's kind of scary that she named heir daughter after her mom... WHO is haunting her dreams like a living zombie.

(you have horrible, or should I say GOOD imagery there... *shudders* lol too good of imagery in the beginning of the chapter.)

I just hope I can forget about it and not have nightmares.

I'm sad it's already over, but I enjoyed reading the story. Awesome job :)

Lol Edward sleeping like that in public. Cute and funny.

UGH Charlie!

OMG! SHE left? What the heck?

Ah! Lol climbing through a window and getting busted? Soo funny. I loved it.

OMG! I soo thought he was going to answer... then it seemed like he WASN'T going to. Ugh.. my heart was working overtime during those moments. Especially with the 'woman's' voice! Eek!

Oh and it nearly broke my heart when Edward said that Bella wasn't good for him, I think last chapter. I was like "WTF?" Lol... and it hurt too.