While I like the story, I do not like alternating POVs that is a rehash of what happened in the previous chapter.

Thanks for writing

Lots of action and drama in the chapter. Plus lemons. Loved it.

Great chapter. Loved pissed Edward. Looking forward to seeing what comes next

Lol. Just a dream. You’re bad!

Yeah for Edward & Abbey

I get the “over the top in love” feeling- but giving everything up without a worry is a worry

Enjoying your adventure. Lotsa fun.

Abby sounds so sweet. Can’t help but think how Tanya and Amber Heard sound alike. Liars! Lol

I’m a fan of your writing. I like that you keep the story moving forward at a good pace.

Thank you for sharing your art.

Love your letter to Edward.

The story is a bit of a crazy journey… but that makes it fun.

Just heard about your story. From a poll of memorable first fan fics.

Liking Chapter 1 and your Bella. Good start

Thanks for writing this wonderful story!

Awesome story. Thank you. Though I would have liked to see babies.

Charlie should be ashamed of himself, he has been an awful father. Even when Bella spoke to him the first time about Edward he berated her, she should have just washed her hands of him. What kind of father allows men to abuse his daughter? He had to suspect.

What Edward should do in his situation is bring Abby to a child psychologist. There might not have been physical abuse but it sounds like there was emotional abuse and neglect. A child psychologist being on Edward’s side in court would help. Also because of Edward lifestyle I would have had Edward take regular blood test to show he didn’t do drugs. He shouldn’t have to prove that but it wouldn’t hurt.
In all I can’t understand why Edward even has to fight for his daughter against her proven neglectful and drug addict mother.